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Dancing Star

She's three years old
has her head in the clouds
dancing on silver lining
waving down at the ground
~*~
Whirling and twirling
she grins as she spins
faster than before
her feet play the floor
~*~
Imagination pours forth
audience applause
she takes a deep bow
and recedes from the clouds
~*~

 


This is Dedicated to my daughter Kathryn Alexis.  She recently started dance class.  The above image was taken before her first dance class. 

Author notes

My daughter, Kathryn, is my Muse  Laughing  She is three years old, and just started dance class about 3 weeks ago.  She loves it!  She actually listens to the teacher.  Dancing is a constant in her life, and I really hope she continues it- as she is very good!

 

And Lizzy, sweetie, Keep your head up.  I will always be here for you if you need to talk, and I LOVE YOU!

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  • still.she.waits
    March 15
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    awwwwwwwww. this is so sweet. i love it.
    love it.

  • poets whisper silver member
    February 15

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    I love her coming down from the clouds after she hears applause. So many of us are that way! thank you for entering


  • blood.stained.tears
    February 11

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    very beautiful poem, I am not going to do critical responses til it is over, but it is a very lovely poem, and your daughter is beautiful!!!


  • superstition
    February 9

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    First of all, your daughter is precious! It's great that she is already showing appreciate for the arts in this way, and your poem does a wonderful job of expressing it. I love the thoughts of being in the clouds during the dance....good to having that feeling as if you're flying. Great writing.


  • hearts blossoms
    February 8

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    beautifully quaint little poem a real insight into your world and your heart, your daughter is adorable and a precious gift to you
    well done sweet friend
    abigail x


  • Rheea gold member
    February 7

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    What a charmer, oh how we wish they could stay dreamers and dancers and mommy's girls.
    you have a winner here.


  • LilEmoPrincess
    February 7

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    Well chrissy. such a cute poem for a cute lil girl
    haha nice work with th Muse and gd luck in the contest


  • GoodbyeFarewell
    February 7

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    great job

    i really love this i love how it rhymed and i love the ryhtm great job amazing write very cute picture lol amazing write keep up the good work stay true stay sic peace out and have a nice day

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