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comfort came with the rain








when her ashes dissolved in the waters
I remember thinking; she is now a life-cycle
that will come in rain to visit & smile at me from flower
so that I will know, she is always, always there

I washed my hands in the stream,
pressed wet fingertips to lips
then held them over heart
& felt loneliness contract
by the tiniest bit


comfort came with the rain



today thaw is dripping past windows
half-cracked, the panes holding
tight to a bony outline of frost

each drop hits the ground
in a melody that should soothe but doesn’t
& I miss, miss her


I fear lonely getting bigger
& her growing smaller






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  • thepoetssoul
    February 10

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    When you feel lonely remember the moments that make you happy, and know she shares them with you
    Thanks for sharing your heart and soul.
    Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


  • Daizee silver member
    February 8

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    I love the last line. Time does heal all wounds... but sometimes time really does linger so long.

    Love,
    Stacy

  • amysticwriter silver member
    February 8
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    Good write, so well comforts those of us who grieve...you are not alone...

  • patrick20traveler
    February 8

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    I was surprised by the ending. It is a very interesting write and made me think a lot about that life-cycle and the grief that never really ends.