When life no longer makes sense
When love seems to disappear
and your heart turns into ice
you can hear them screaming your name
to join them in Hell
the temptation breaking you down
you long to die
yet long to stay alive
long to be loved
long to be accepted
yet stray to the shadows
the saftey of your darkness
because your just too twisted
too insane
too far gone
to feel their love
their hatered
their laughter
to see the reason
for everything
for nothing
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I find this to be a very deep write. Great write hun! Keep up the good work.
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interesting... I like it. One suggestion in the 10th line I would drop I would have dropped "long to be" and kept the rest of the stanza... those are repeated a little muchfor me. Other than that one suggestion I do like this very much.
Title suggestion may be absymal. Just a suggestion.
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