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Directions to the Sun

1. Come out of the {{darkness}} , 
                                           
                                        the  >>>depression<<< , 
                                                                     
                                                                    &  the  d.o.o.m.
(.TWO.)-  S.
                  T.
                      E.
                          P.  into the  **light**  and  -o-u-t-  of the  {} tomb {}


3-  //Forgive//  and  {don't}    ~forget~  yourself,  you're the only  !! ONE !!
                                                                                         
                                                       
                                        --who can  >>follow>>  these directions....

                your    <^> directions <^>  to the
                                  *S* *U* *N*

Author notes

Option 3: #4-Directions to the Sun

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Comments


  • RenaissanceGirl
    February 8

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    Goddamn girl, this was awesome. I loved the way you were creative with the format and your words flowed nicely.
    Good luck in that contest.
    -E


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 8
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    wow-o. This is really good. The dirty pretty was superb and the background fits perfectly. I loved the last two lines. I love how you put it into a "how-to" form. This is a perfectly done dirty pretty, although I would like to see more elaboration of the poem. Other than that, it's great. Good job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Beauty Of Silence
    February 7

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    WOWZER! girl, this is really interesting, the form is really out-of-this-world (in a good way ofcourse) though it took me centuries to get it AND ITS YELLOW!!! i'm instantly in love with it hahahs, this was good, keep penning


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 7

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    Wow! This is pretty neat. I love your form
    and the thought that you put into this one.
    Beautiful work and good luck!




    Jeremy0826