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How To Make Love, 2

  

 

 

When the one you love dies,

bury them naked in a garden.

 

Let wood spirits, rain, moon

have their way with the one

you still love.

 

When harvest time comes

take care when you swallow these:

scars unreturned, forgiven things,

all receipts and the spindle.

 

The rest, light that always

seemed to be somewhere else,

gulp down whole:

 

learn of the only lovemaking

flowers ever come from —

 

this last best done long before.

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • tjmusepal
    February 7

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    CONTRARY TO MY EXPECTATIONS AND T O MY DELIGHT IT 'S A REFINED LOVE MAKING IMMORTALITY MANUAL-HOW TO ELUDE MATING CRY..WHERE'S PART 1-DOES IT DEAL WITH OR FANTASISE ON 4-PLAY?I HOPE YOU CAN'T JETTISON AROUSAL MATTER IN THE LOVE ACT.ONLY FEW ARE OUT OF THE LAW OF LOVE -RETRIEVING THE OPPOSITE GENDER PLEASURE IN PARTS OR OR IN REPRODUCTIVE MANER-EXPENSIVE COOPERATION OR AGAIN A MUTUALLY FACILE CONCESSION-TJMUSEPA

  • HollyLouise
    February 7

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    wow


    wow you have used some really powerful language here:

    scars unreturned, forgiven things,

    how you have described emotion is very real and creates such deep feelings when reading.

    Keep writing,
    Holly.


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 7

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    A sumptuous feast...


    This is such a sumptuous feast. A veritable cornucopia of metaphor & ohhh, such magical & powerful use of language. Incredibly penned, in such a timeless fashion ~ it struck me just as deeply this morning as it might have 4 years from now.

     

     


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 7

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    nice

    I really liked the fourteeth and fifthteenth line. this poem reminds me, in the beginning of a relation ship you have to learn how to make love with out pain. It can be very pleasurable when you understand how your partner feels. consider a woman's feelings so you can make it pleasurable. I feel sad about about your loss, kind of funny place to bury him. I woun't be able to deal with this. It was a pleasure to read your poem

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