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Dalifornication

there's a beast in me
warm blooded
caged
inside my corset
disguised underneath
my oversized tee
hungry to devour you
rake your back
with my nails

paint your body
colors
psychedelic to the mind
spill impropriety
from mouth to mouth

kisses with my red lipstick

lick
suck
tongue
moans

of
mmms...
damn

ahh...

ooh...

shhh...

 

blood rush
hands touch...

our bodies
pivot in circadian rhythm
ready for minutes to hours

tick tocks
memento mori

to fuck
and that means
now

Author notes

a bit crude from my usual style
just got to write it though
I don't know if it made any sense

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  • Rend the Veil gold member
    June 20

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    perfect sense, you are so gifted!!!
    i loved this write not crude just raw the way i like it!!! your awesome!!

    Blessings my friend

    Rend


  • Swtpoetryman
    May 31

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    to fuck
    and that means
    now


    O, and how! That is quite a stimulating invitation that I believe no one would be able to decline - for it seems you have enough love and all the right stuff to entice and add the sweetest spice to the body, heart, soul, and mind - as they lines paint a fine picture of -

    paint your body
    colors
    psychedelic to the mind


    filled with heart and soul, sweet emotion, and passionate love.


    The background fit this piece to a T - and re-awakened the 60's/70's love child and hippy in me!

    Peace & Love, Anna Baby!
    Earl.

    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      May 31
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      Earl

      Thank you and thanks for liking the bg as well. I like it and then there is a model behind this bg and then I cut and paste it lol


  • PorcelainHope
    May 28

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    Yes, it makes perfect sense!!
    I was in a different world for a minute.. LOL.

    Sensual and amazing..


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    April 14

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    "rake your back
    with my nails" - - wow awesome write! growl! lol





  • Eldrich Capricorn
    March 14

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    umm...or yummm! this makes perfect sense....sensual.
    not only does this stimulate the mind but it makes the body sing. I love the title as well. Anna Lee shy...pish-posh. Hot, Hot, Hot!! I love this piece A LOT! All of it makes me tingle... I could be specific about which parts but the whole thing rocked me.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    March 14
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    Hot...

  • The High Lonesome
    March 4
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    WOW! ! !

    Anna Lee! You had me from the first line and held me til the end. Whew!
    Fargo


    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      March 6
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      Fargo, thank you so much for being here in my page...It's nice to see you here


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 13
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    you wrote it very sensually well.

  • Rambunctious
    February 9

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    Poetess; it made the most beautiful of sense and brings your emotions to a reading's delight. I felt the strength and power of this write, easier on the mind than those who choose to describe, as though we have no imaginative intelligence...
    More of this, please!
    Bravo and Kudos!

    Ron.


  • bigperm gold member
    February 8

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    very raw emotion...

    we all get those animalistic erges to...write.lol It's good to see such an honest piece that is not only metaphorical, but also very witty. I'm glad you stepped out of your comfort zone for this one.

  • Bruce silver member
    February 8

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    Hmmm . . . very interesting, and different from your usual style. I thought the poem changed during its course, becoming more insistent from the first two stanzas until its close. You demonstrate your usual brilliant imagery as in: spill impropriety / from mouth to mouth. Well done!


  • Ken-Maverick
    February 8

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    Anna Lee Venida!!!
    Ummmm yeah, this is hawt!
    Don't know what else to say really
    except you Go Girl!!!

    All the best to you

    Ken

  • dx d by me
    February 7
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    Incredibly explosove, vivid, imagery. Fantastic write!!! Geo


  • Mr Id
    February 7

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    The last stanza is blooming excellent- very satisfying conclusion and appropriately short.

    lick
    suck
    tongue
    moans

    of
    mmms...
    shhh...
    damn

    ahh...

    ooh...

    I really like how this bit is laid out, too. Especially the fact that 'moans' and 'ooh' rhyme, which gives it just enough rhythm. I think I would have preferred it not to have 'shhh', though. It breaks up the rhythm a little. But that's just me...

    Great stuff indeed- I think this is the most enjoyable poem I have read by you!


    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      February 7
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      Thanks whew. I am happy you like this one so far. I was really doubting if I am making any sense hehe...

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 7

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    this is so beautiful, very, very sensual, and it's naughty in the best way possible, love this one, Anna....


    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      February 7
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      Ms Tara, thank you so much... and I thought I was the first to comment on your poem lol


  • styrofoam
    February 7
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    O: bold and sexy.

    and honest.

    i like that (:


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 7

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    HOTT damn!!!

    l.o.l. yeah, now this has some serious passion!! i live off passion.. excellent and nothing to apologize about shorty, this is bookmarked!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 7

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    Wozzers!!!

    Did someone turn the temperature up, because it's beastly hot in here!!! This is one that caught my attention for sure, wonderfully inscribed, and you this poem to death girl!! That's a good thing, just so ya know!!! Thanks for sharing you, much peace and love my friend!!!


    -Timothy


  • Yemassee gold member
    February 7

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    Remember we must die, therefore, get the clothes off, we don't have time for nonsense! lol

    Been a while but I have been there, those carnal moments, and when you know it is based on love as well, those moments are indeed intense...or as I remember way back in 1923.

    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      February 7
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      Thank you Sir Yem for the translation hehe. I've been trying to write this since jan esp that memento mori part Oh 1923 lol, I was thinking if I am on that time or maybe earlier, I'll be wearing a corset with coiffed hair and a red lipstick


      • Yemassee gold member
        February 7
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        You did well with the poem. I'm a skilled translator huh, lol.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    February 7

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    We all have that inside and it's fine to let it out!!!
    I like how you exposed the feelings of desire without covering them with veils. Very intense, strong and yes, as Nic said, the 'now' ends it so well.
    Hot and very good poem Anna


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 7

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    hmmmm...i love the emphasis on "now" . nothing wrong with being warm-blooded, Anna Lee - keep that hunger!

    ~ Nicolette

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