They do not seem such little things at all,
The way your roses liven up my day.
The subtle tints that easily enthral
And crystallize the dreams your eyes convey.
Just watching you brings round a nameless joy,
Like sprinkled rays that rouse a drowsy dawn;
That's why I turn once more a clueless boy
Whenever I look on those looks redrawn.
It's heartening the way your hues disarm
And make my masks just disappear each time;
The glow that lures and lulls me with its charm
And wraps me in sweet ecstasies sublime.
I hope that these poor words of mine will bring
Another smile that's worth remembering.
Author notes
A contest entry
- Sonnet Contest for Sonneteers Only by Amera.
10000 points, ended March 1, 2009, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Anything! by ToxicSuicide.
700 points, ended March 22, 2009, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is an absolutely superb Shakespearean sonnet! Perfect meter throughout and and well worthy of a Gold trophy!!!
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lovely
Again its a great piece of work to read. good expression. you used mega words. good job.
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You have written
such a beautiful poem; wording soft off mind and heart, with a tone on sincerity and honesty. I wish you the best in this contest. Blessings. Frans
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ahhh...such is sweet romance...very nice here. good luck with the contest entry. thanks for sharing. I liked this very much. peace and light always, kp
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Wow you have done something that i have not got the guts to try ( write a sonnet) not only have you tried you have done an excellent job with it .It flows beautifully and this makes for wonderful reading Excellent
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Sooo nice !!!!!
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I especially like lines 4 and 6.
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I know that you rarely see a critical comment from me in a public comment but this contest has attracted the best poets on this web site. I feel that I owe each poem the best attention I can give.
This sonnet is so very worthy to be in this contest and competing with the best sonneteers on this website. What a joy to recite out loud! Penned in iambic pentameter and perfect decasyllable it flows like a mellow stream of love into the reader’s heart. I believe sonnets were made for love poems and this poem speaks of the purest type of love, the love for natural beauty. Your Volta is properly place in L-9 and is well defined as your pivot speaks of your disarmed heart. The only critical comments I have are with the punctuation. For instance you use a semicolon in L-2 and I think there should be a period because you don’t actually continue the thought in L-3 so a full stop would serve better than a pause. I also notice that you frequently use a comma before the word “and”, the word “and” usually creates a natural pause before it and a comma is generally used to there to change a thought completely. I want to thank you for helping to make our contest a success and I know my co-judge will love this poem as well.
Love,
Amera♥
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Although not my poem
this is a lovely informative comment enabling others to learn. Frans
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Very sweet and certainly smile-invoking.
Very romantic and very nice wording. Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
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