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My Garden

“As ye sow…”
In my ignorance
how could I know
I was the fertile ground?

I sit among the weeds…
my garden.

Beauty is in the eye
of the innocent.


Author notes

Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://oloferla.deviantart.com/art/Autumn-49089735
30 words only (30 used)

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  • Meroza
    February 9

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    This is damn good, I like how you took this prompt. And such imagery, and the chosen words.
    Also I loved these lines:
    "In my ignorance
    how could I know
    I was the fertile ground?"

    Best of luck


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    February 8

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    wow talk about intense & dark. the last line in the first stanza is powerful & packs a punch. such a sad poem too, unfortunately many of my childhood friends went through something this unthinkable.
    excellent take on the prompt

    good luck
    kat

  • phoenixonfire
    February 7

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    That was so exotic! The words were like a painful song with a hope so pale and dimnished! Lovely write! Good luck in the contest!
    ~pri


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 7

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    This feels more foreboding then it appears.
    "How could I know I was the fertile ground" leaves much to the imagination.

    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck

    Shari