Sultry pearls
of summer
June's perfume
smelled
like sex.
Dreadlocked
stares
across hazed
lust.
eyes as
vacant as
the empty
parking lot.
A contest entry
- Quickie>>>20x40 wordsx1 hr by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended February 9, 2009, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I laughed, because I read the thing about the pearls, and the name june, and made me think of the movie/show leave it to beaver, and how they were all perfect and stuff, then when you mentioned her perfume smelling like sex i thought about the movie..oh bah idk what its called...something -ville...pleasantville, where they live in that type of word till they discover sex and color comes to the black and white show
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rofl i love the last comment. awesome work
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June's perfume
smelled
like sex.
no erotica. -
Will that lot fit a '72 duece an a quarter?! Told without telling a thing- nice work!
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The imagery is indeed fresh, weaving a sensual presence of spark into embers to ponder. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest!
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Nice imagery here C
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awesome.
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