hot summer evening
a cool breeze on naked skin
slow turn of my fan~ ~
Author notes
Traditional Haiku
5-7-5 syllables
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XLII - by Bear by Arkbear.
500 points, ended February 17, 2009, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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It's a beatiful poem, congradulations on the gold.
Well deserved
Tony
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That really is a wonderful haiku, well deserving of the gold.
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thank you
mal
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MMmmmm....rich in visual and I can feel and hear the slow squeeky fan turning in its' old age...I picture me on the island of St. John in the Carribean (sp) in a vacationers, bamboo hut with the sheer drapes blowing ever so gently.....VERY nice, Mal....good luck & God bless,
Bear ~
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now that's great imagination bear...something id enjoy also
thanks
mal
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In reading,one recalls such soft breath whispering across moist heated flesh.Kinda gives one shivers.
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sorta like someone special blow softly over those sensitive places...
for you
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what happened to the air conditioning?
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i leave that to your imagination naughty... lol
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