At times I choose to sit
devoid of all wit;
doing very little
feeling noncommital.
Then...
a memory of you
brings
your face into view.
My composure is spent
double-over and bent.
I jump up and cry
out loud to the sky.
Thanks for the insight
and showing me the light.
Before the indoctrination
was complete,
love beat a hasty retreat.
A contest entry
- Give me some Luvin' n Soul! by natchstucco.
1050 points, ended February 16, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Absolutely wonderful! I think of meditation and insight when I read this--a more transitional phase. This is definitely something I can relate to. Thanks for sharing! I love everything about the poem and would change nothing about it. Congratulations on the honorable win!
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Maybe you are hungry, or just ate something that doesnt agree with you. Love and food are close to the same feeling. lol. Seriously now. i enjoyed this script. it is well done, rhymed and with articulation. i particularily like your style in the poem, how the stanzas are set. good luck.
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Ha! it does rather sound like a bad case of indigestion eh?
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Oh, I love this! So expressive in brevity.
The rhyme is such a tasty part of this.
Beautifully done.
KW~
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Powerful,
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Thanks for the poem here Pennye! Brilliantly composed from your pen. You did good!
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Just hold onto your soul at all costs.
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