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Chains of Wind

Tethered by longing, temptation controlled,
my love’s inconstant, my mind running free
seeking perfection. It can’t be consoled.

Driven to wander by false imagery,
promises whispered in film and in prose,
leaving my heart devoid of constancy.

Emotions inundate what the mind knows
forcing my heart in a pointless pursuit,
drifting sans direction as the wind blows.

I stop for a time, ‘till the need’s acute
before wandering on. My heart is mute.



Author notes

Prompt: Tethered shall I stray. (Option 6)
Picture Credit: http://kleemass.deviantart.com/art/Chains-80127859
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Form: Terza Rima ~ is a three-line stanza using chain rhyme in the pattern a-b-a, b-c-b, c-d-c, d-e-d. There is no limit to the number of lines, but poems or sections of poems written in terza rima end with either a single line or couplet repeating the rhyme of the middle line of the final tercet. There is no set rhythm for terza rima, but in English, iambic pentameter is generally preferred.

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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    February 12

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    Clever piece of poetry
    I loved the whole poem
    Its deep..
    Thank you and best wishes my friend
    Julie


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 11
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    what a deep piece my dear one.
    Well done and best of wishes

    Love
    Passions


  • Meroza
    February 9

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    This poem here is deep. Also the image adds a lot of personality to your words. Well written, I expecially liked this line:
    "seeking perfection. It can’t be consoled."

    Best of luck


  • JinSays gold member
    February 8

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    Emotions inundate what the mind knows
    forcing my heart in a pointless pursuit,
    drifting sans direction as the wind blows.


    It amazes me how you can embody these very personal emotions, and still are able to make it lovely.
    Sad yes, but still lovely.
    A gorgeous write.
    Love,
    jin


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    February 8

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    I knew this was form poetry before I even hit the second stanza You're really great with these.. this is an incredibly sad poem, one that I'm sure many can relate to in many ways. the emotions can be felt clearly throughout the entire poem.
    Brilliant job

    good luck
    kat


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 7
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    Nicely penned sir, an enviable write.

    All the best,

    mj.


  • Topaze gold member
    February 7
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    A lovely piece Ken, very smooth. My best wishes.


  • maralisa silver member
    February 7
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    a wonderful tka eon the promt good luck inthe contestmaralisa

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