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Precipice

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Inevitability drowns out reason.
Sacrifice blocks out sense.

No fear clouds my mind,
Only stupidity
And foolish chivalry

Life hardly begun,
And yet so much to bear.

And so I teeter,
I slip,
I fall...
  ...Willingly. 


No time of indecision.
No room for qualms.

I hate my fate.
I embrace my fate.

My horror is realized.
My horror is cherished.

Author notes

30 - 60 words

Picture Prompt: http://wildfire2003.deviantart.com/art/Abandoned-111353698

It may be hard to see the relation between the picture and poem. It's deeply metaphorical...so trust me, it is related in my odd perspective.

This poem used to be better...until my cat walked across the keyboard and deleated it. So I ended up with this. Its not quite as good, but I'm certainly satisfied with the result.

I can not be sure of how much this makes sense to the outside eye. It's a bit...vauge. That seems to be the key to my poetry: vaugness. I, nor anyone else, can be quite sure of the reasons behind this persons actions, or even their actions at all. It shows their inner turmoil. In a way, I guess that makes this poem more aplicable to everyone - it has an ability to be interpreted in many different ways.

I do know what I was thinking...I also can't think of any way to explain my thoughts as to what this poem is about exactly. Welcome to my insane mind.

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Comments

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  • checkmate-
    February 7

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    Awesome piece! And I agree with all of the people who commented down below (Hi everyone below ) poetry is all about interpretation... I think. *scratches head* Vagueness is cool

    Which kitty was it? Bella or Flash? That has happened to me... more than once...

    Anyways, awesome job! This is a really sad - but I like it anyways. Especially the last couple stanzas! And (to copy everyone below - hi again! ) it's a strong piece. Very strong. One of those pieces I can understand, but can't, and then can again, at least the way I'm interpreting it.

    -Paradox


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    February 7

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    This is a very strong piece, personally I believe poetry is all about interpretation so to be honest I bypassed the author notes because I don't want to know how or why you wrote it just read it. Well penned. Best to you in the contest


  • Ademon
    February 6

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    very strong and very full of imagery, it's well written and although I dislike cats, you've done an amazing job...and no cats have nothing to do with your poetry other than the fact that it deleted your poem...little buggers...anyway Bravo on the poem.


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 6

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    Strong piece. Love what you've done with the prompt! Great job and good luck to you!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • Rose Angel gold member
    February 6

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    Great metaphor here and you do not need explain..Your interpretation of the picture....


  • jcat gold member
    February 6

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    I don't think your AN is needed!! I got the feeling of this piece and was quite taken in by the feelings you were trying to convey!! Sometimes the decision to give life is a difficult one and at other times it is a cherished one. I have walked this path before and your piece made my heart ache all over again. Very well done

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