Softly, she kisses the nape of his neck;
"you were never the breath... I couldn't find"
and, tearless, she leaves him behind
in whispers- caught
off guard......
A contest entry
- Whispers by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended February 20, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I would love a critical comment on how I can make these lyrics better.
Comments
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A very mysterious write. Leave me wanting to know more about this picture
Nice job. Thanks for writing for my contest. I'm honored to have you show your work here.
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Heartfelt and the anxious thoughts come out. Blessings.
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