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Dark Death poem ?

I feel so dark
So down on this world
There’s nothing leaft
I lived with regrets
To many to count
So much confusion
Within this house

You can sit there and say
The worlds supposed to be that way
I dream of more
It doesn’t have to be that way
I can release myself
The suicide way
To a place with
No more regrets
It’s a load off my chest
Ill be laid to rest
To hell with this confusion
Ill see no more illusions

Just walk out the door
Take the last step
No looking back
Feelings of joy will feel your brain

that’s the end of my story
I died that night
Thinking it would lead to such delight
I’m out of this hell and im glad to tell
I died with a smile couldn’t ya tell ?

Wrote in 5 mins anywhere i can shape it up ?

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  • Shawnecy808
    February 6

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    Pretty good piece.A couple things..line#8,"U can sit there and say"change "U" to "you" it would help.Maybe go through and fix punctuation a little.nice pen though...