Whispers, soft and warm against my cheek
skin to skin, sweet words that mean nothing
roll off your tongue and into my soul
Lies, delicately placed in a yearning heart
I believe because it’s easier than being broken
So I drink in each syllable, as if my life depended
Happiness, a dream, a fallacy told by love
Reality, left with nothing but pieces
I pick them up, put them in my pocket
And start over…
…. again
Author notes
Inspired by:
Sweet Nothings
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2228711
greyhaime
I didnt read the poem until after I wrote mine, I didnt want to be too influenced by your words, just the title. 
In a list
A contest entry
- Greeter's Group Contest by LionessK.
800 points, ended March 2, 2009, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
love....
Comments
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I found this write to be well penned, and true to the title... I loved the emotion and true feelsing that were captured in each stanza. I was sucked in by many sweet nothings of men for the longest time. I really loved and related to the last stanza...
""Happiness, a dream, a fallacy told by love
Reality, left with nothing but pieces
I pick them up, put them in my pocket
And start over…
…. again""
This write touched me. thank you for your penning. -
this was,
great,
i love how you used the word 'roll', it gives a certain
beat to the line...truely, great.
=)
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I do like how you waited to read Krystal's words and only used the title for inspiration. It can go many places that way. I can relate to your words here.
Wonderful job with this.
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Yes!
Even with its pitfalls, LOVE is worth the effort. Your poem speaks clearly the realities of life and love. How would we know the pain without the experience? I believe in karma...when one sets out to hurt their return will be triple-fold. I feel these words to the core because I have been hurt by love before. Sadly beautiful!
Hope you did/do well in the contest.
Always Loving YOU ♥
Renee
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Great write! I can understand....again...
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Gosh ~
When I reached the last line in the second stanza I went
~Sighhhh~
Such a beautifully penned poem hun; there is so much romance felt within I couldn't tear my eyes away or stop my heart beating in time with the words
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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My first read of your work, and I am impressed...Delightfully intimate, full of imagery..this is a favorite write to my heart..
in all dimensions! and Bookmarked!
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Your second stanza was really brilliant.
Believing lies because being broken is so much harder - I agree.
Your write is amazing darling, I felt every word.
Good luck
Shari
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I love the way you have written this, the words you have used are so powerful. And it is true, i think sometimes we would rather believe the lies that make us feel good, rather then recognise they're the truth.
Beautifully written.
Keep writing,
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Beautifully penned and so sad. Starting over is the pits, and yes, sometimes we'd rather have the pretty lies, than the ugly truth. Well-done.
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This poem seems as if it is meant to be whispered, and it is very beautifully written.
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Such a truthful and painful piece. I know myself I can relate to this! Even though we may know that people that we love are telling us lies, sometimes it is great to just believe them anyways. Best of luck in the contest!
Sarah
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been there.. done that
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wow,,
you did a great job with the tittle....that middle stanza just rocks!
love it!
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thanks for the inspiration
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I like the resilience an determination here, facing a sense of what real and finding a way...excellent...PK
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Ah, but when those pieces become a whole, become THE good piece, then we smile again
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love this, very deep.
♥
whisper
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Success at anything, including love, is a matter of getting up one
more time than we are knocked down.
Hugs...Eddy
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