a casual glance
Spring’s awakening promise
attraction takes root
a blush colors cheeks
a smile opens budding lips
rose petal blossoms
Author notes
In honor of Valentine's Day 
Traditional Haiku
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XLII - by Bear by Arkbear.
500 points, ended February 17, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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This Haiku here I understood, and that dosen't happen very often. Well written both of them, tho the top one is my favorite of those two.
Best of luck in the contest
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In the place Im in, I hate V day
I think this poem is lovely though.
I like the comparison of lips and petals, a welcome invitation to kiss away.
Sweet as sugar.
Love,
jin
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I really enjoyed this Haiku.
Great title, with wonderful wording to follow in your poem.
Love it !!
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Hey Ken ~
Ya know, I enjoyed all of your write.....except, the L which is most important.....for me -
The last L sounds common-place and does not end with an AHA moment....
..you built me up, but left me hanging onto cliche' words at the end....hmmm....you can enter another if you wish.....2 entries per Poet
Thank you for coming out to support this contest,
Bear ~
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Nice, the wording is really great and I can see what you're materializing. Great job man!
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Wow brilliant
I love this style of writing and your words pen such an image in my mind
Well written and structured
I must glance and see the image
Best wishes
Julie
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