"I'm gonna tear your playhouse down"
between the lines
there exists monsters,
ghosts, skeletons,
& each of the seven
cardinal sins
between the shrouded sheets
barely laid, enslaved to each other's doubts
she was sloth to his envy
him, with greenslick eyes
wished a greedy night
to kiss her lips
snakehips grew a body of lust
then slithered
slow, down and down
O' red red rose, you pretty little thing
diaphonous darings to the moon's pride
stood the wrath of wanton tongues
they: talked in many languages
spilled their guts onto the fragile earth
& stared into the rings of hell
- fucked all night long
another day
another dollar
gluttony exits
on the town
Author notes
thanks Suzi for the lines and the shove...
and the opening line is from I'm going to tear your playhouse down by Ann Peebles - listen here : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9Zon0akQL-0&feature=channel_page
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Fucking great.
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Brilliant
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the title had me... great write
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but for every snakehip
there was a snake belt
awkward there then
fuck em
nice one
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Didn't really care for the italiced part at the end, the line before it seemed to be just as good of an ending as any other. Of course, I've been out of the game of reading/writing poetry as of late so perhaps I'm a bit rusty in both areas these days. eh, that's life.
Great poem, except of course the two italiced verses at the end.
-Nam
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That sin seems soo good! You are an excellent sinner
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i can only agree with al, gilly - excellent!
~ Nicolette
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thankie ma'am..... i must have been a bad girl, in my previous life?? lololol
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nobody writes sin like you Gill
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thanks Al, Suzi really started this one off, and i just ran with it...
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Thanks for a great musical interlude, Gillian...
As for your poem!
I think the playhouse was set on fire and the sparks are floating all across town!
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thank you Gary... hope all is well with you and yours... how's jane doing??
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...and sometimes language seems the unnecessary evil on a night made for sinning lol...a wasted minute, can never be spared. C
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swimming with sin and sharks and moons.. lololol
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What a way to fulfill the appetite, feeling jus' fine between the lines. Especially liked " wished a greedy night to kiss her lips" I like your Friday sins
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thankie thankie
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love it
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thankie
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Hmmm...Ann Peebles, ehhh??? She was a "Brick House", wasn't she??? You know, "Mighty, mighty, just lettin' it all hang out"??? roflmao
Dammmn, Missy G. You go & then you pass go & then you collect $200 on the flip~flop. 
I really enjoyed the "red red rose" portion of your program, m'Lady. I'm quite sure the Royals are totally stoked about it, too. 
Yes, M'am. You're one rockin' Soul~FULL Woman, you are, my Friend. I know. 'Retha knows. Otis suspected as much, too. Classic stuff here, Scribe. 
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just great big smiles here Wanda
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Yeahhh, I know, Gill. My face hurts.
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um.. YUM
you took the sins and made them
so good
I'm glad I gave them to you
they were wasting away in the draft box.
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thanks to you, you gave the opening shot and i ran with it...
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