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Braid The Sweet Chaos

                            
 
 
 

Oh watch not the flight of the golden sparrow, see it in my eyes instead,

for in a meadow each pace or cathedral organ’s swell

or strand of oceaned gleaming hair across a lover’s steadfast mouth

lie immeasurable solo odd chords sliding under the bass clef

I know

 

and I know fragrance of finite envelopment

is a sound mere of orgasmic hum observed by flesh alone,

an entropy, the lading of pollen by lilies 

through flights of birds

or duet squeezed like ripe plum through virgin tendrils

as unity, mixture or solution

I know

 

and I know sound of infinite release is the feel mere 

of an orgasmic shrink of almost anything

save the giving of birth

except a unity squeezed like ripe plum through virgin tendrils

as solo, mixture or solution

 

an entropy, the lading of pollen by lilies through flights of birds

 

all that, a cauldron pulse of murderous logics pretending a magical random math                     

 — the firmamental metronomic, a lustre’s curl swathed of dust

 

 

but flesh beloved braids flesh beloved a mathless seduction

and the twine of your touch is sweet chaos.

 

Oh watch not the flight of the golden sparrow, ride within my eyes instead.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                                  

                                                

Author notes

dedicated to my ... Swan

punctuation, spelling, grammar, formatting, word inventions ... only judges may foolishly there tread, and my Swan, of course, and the other three who are allowed to challenge my mastery of the language


image credit: MOonshine90 at deviantART




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  • Wolfdog silver member
    March 16

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    Superb

    A very fine write, indeed. You expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • Aelten
    March 16

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    Oh, this was heavenly! absolutely loved it. What a brilliant poet.
    The last three lines I could read over and over...
    Khia


  • individuality gold member
    March 16

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    sorry, but i will give my excuse as your writing is too small and i have had a drink so i could not focus on the words, i suggest making the font a little higher to help us poor souls with poor eyesight.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 16
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  • Draig aine gold member
    February 18

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    shivers

    an entropy, the lading of pollen by lilies through flights of birds



    all that, a cauldron pulse of murderous logics pretending a magical random math

    — the firmamental metronomic, a lustre’s curl swathed of dust





    but flesh beloved braids flesh beloved a mathless seduction

    and the twine of your touch is sweet chaos.



    Oh watch not the flight of the golden sparrow, ride within my eyes instead.


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    February 8

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    Personally, I love the fact that you interlace the words, the feeling of the words, the font face and the addition of the pic, so intricately as to give a seamless appearance as a whole.

    But beyond that, the story that you tell within this poem leaves me breathless. You create magic with simple language and your Swan is a lucky one indeed.

    My favorite part of this bliss is:

    "but flesh beloved braids flesh beloved a mathless seduction

    and the twine of your touch is sweet chaos."

    Beautiful. But I will admit that I have a personal gratification with this piece anyway - my beautiful niece's name is Sparrow.

    :-)

    And this makes me want to give up the ghost on trying to compete with your skills!


  • Sonja
    February 7

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    You are a poet. The real one. The beginning of this poem is just out of any discussion. Too beautiful...
    ~

    Oh watch not the flight of the golden sparrow, see it in my eyes instead,
    for in a meadow each pace or cathedral organ’s swell

    and the ending of it is... WAW!
    ~Sonja~

  • This is beautiful... so very intricate with the tone of imagery to amorous thought. The detail flows in rhythmic notion of feeling and sincerity throughout. Powerful penning here, nicely done!


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 6

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    Magnificence Redefined...



    "but flesh beloved braids flesh beloved a mathless seduction

    and the twine of your touch is sweet chaos.

     

    Oh watch not the flight of the golden sparrow, ride within my eyes instead."

     

    ~ * ~

     

    "my Swan, of course, and the other three who are allowed to challenge my mastery of the language"

    This is the finest, most elegant gift you've left on my heart's threshold thus far, m'Love...Sighhh...This is the best, most wonderful thing I've ever read...at least, until you write the next one.

     

     

     

     

     

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