The silent screams of
horrer are in replay in my
splintered mind.
The spellbound glares
of enemy's forever etched
into my kind.
Trapped within a
mental force
they use my pain to
set the course.
Encircled by a hazy doom
I'm falling
close to dying
falling to my tomb.
Agonized by memories
of hope
I fall apart for I've
lost the will to cope.
My shadow falls across the
bloody floor
a the dagger slips and i try
to breathe no more.
The blood pools
as I stare and realize
it's me
as I pick up shards
of hope
and assertain I'm
free...
Author notes
I have not written any poetry for a long time, so please tell me if this is a "good" poem.
Is this a good poem???
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This is a powerful wright, so full of emotions simply raging throughout the whole piece. Well, we all have that 'down' moments but the best part is to try to find something that will bring us up again. I know, that's the hardest part as well. You can be proud of yourself cause you managed to pour all your emotions to a poem, not many people can do that.
Nela
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terrific
that one is really great
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like a screaming guitar
the portray of emotions was very good, poetic wits put to best use, what you have depicted and what you wished that reader must understand, met, without any obscurity, well obviously, every part of it, is what someone helds in heart..... 4/5 stars and yes please revise it for grammatical mistakes.... REST WAS AWESOME!! -
love it! and yes it is a good poem!!!
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This is way more than good....it is amazing....it has a lot of great imagery at the end...and words very well choosen.
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