My dearest...
As dawn gives rise to ghostly mists
I pray, Oh God, that time desists
and quell the fear within my breast,
through tremored hands, now expressed.
My thoughts turn homeward in these hours,
as I commend, to higher powers,
my safe return to loving arms,
to hearth and home, free of all harms.
Within my heart, your image stays
to give me strength in coming days
and fill my nights with warmth recalled
of moments when our love enthralled.
In days gone by, as brothers fell,
and fire raged, a living hell,
duty called to continue on,
still in this game, I’m but a pawn.
Yet each of us feels in his soul
this Nation must remain a whole
so should I fall, no tears for me.
This Union is my legacy.
Should my end come on this field
in final thoughts, my love revealed
by simple words in pen and ink,
an echo from darkness’s brink.
I commend my spirit to the Lord
in certainty, with his accord,
that he will not sever our bond.
We shall embrace once more beyond.
The drummer’s cadence calls to me.
I go to meet my destiny.
My heart is filled with love and pride.
Until once more, I’m by your side…
pray, war and hate are once more shunned.
I remain your loyal, loving husband...
Joshua
Author notes
Prompt: Write a goodbye letter/poem, pledging your undying love
Picture Credit: Civil War veteran Joshua John Casey and his wife.
Artist: David C. Foster
85 line limit
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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stunning
beautifully written deeply felt -
Content: Excellent
Imagery: Excellent
Rhyme: Excellent
Flow: Excellent
...Verdict: Godly!!
A masterful write, full of emotion, yearning, and inner peace found in a time of non-existent peace.
You have outshined my friend.
Thank you for entering, and best of luck.
Ocean.
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Some things never change. The fear of never seeing your loved ones and the call to duty. Richard Lovelace said "I could not love thee dear so much, lived I not honor more."
You have pined a first class poem.
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I'm so entranced by this beautiful poem.. How vividly you've painted a picture of war and chaos and how caught up in it where men and women who believed deeply in what they were fighting for.. It's just a wonderful piece..
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wow..
Excelltent write! you have got alot of talent you should help me lol, my works a rat compared to yor lion of a poem. good job, Keep it up!! -
haunting
an excellent write m best of luck in the conttest
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Thank you for the kind comments
Much appreciated!
Ken -
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you are most welcome
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You've done a brilliant job with this one. I found it to be heart wrenching, and powerful. I love how you brought him to life with your words..[his words]
so many have done just this, and I'm sure that there will be many more. Fantastic job.
good luck
kat
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This poem here is brilliant, I adore how you took this prompt and the story like tale in your words, well done!
Tho, line 17 and 18 both repeat the word "Yet" and it kind of breakes up the flow, other then that the flow is great. Perfect rhyming making it easy to read.
The story line in this one is deep and somewhat personal, that makes it all the more interesting. There's nothing more to point out other then its brilliance.
Best of luck in the contest
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LOl. i give ya 3 applauds! even if your still revisin lol
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OK... when next you're on... It's finished. Don't know if you're in the Civil War yet but it's my take on what a night before Gettysburgh might have seemed.
Ken
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