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Catch Me in the Castle

Rook to pawn one,
Tell me you love me,
Your job is done.
Rinse your face with gallantry,
Step out as a knight,
Smile that cocky smile,
Preparing for a fight.
And you take your sword,
Aim at me,
Just because you’re so bored.
But I’m not your queen,
I’m not your pawn,
Don’t tell me you love me
Because you don’t,
Find someone else to be your naive little fawn.

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