Floating in the endless river of life,
immersed in souls caught in strife;
Crystal waves engulfing the body,
soothing away the hurt as if a melody by Varady;
Seeing souls around me,
reaching out touching me, their abductee;
Whispering down to the depths of my soul,
ushering images of a safe grassy knoll;
Floating in the endless river of life,
awaken immersed in the sounds of a child's fife;
Author notes
Prompt: #13 Immerse
A contest entry
- "Everybody saw the sunshine" Round 2 INVITE ONLY by iamthebeatles.
1500 points, ended April 26, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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very good job on this. Wow! Amazing.
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this is wonderful. I love where you took this prompt, it left a lot to the imagination. Great work.
cassie -
Crystal waves engulfing the body,
soothing away the hurt as if a melody by Varady
I can almost feel it.
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"Whispering down to the depths of my soul,
ushering images of a safe grassy knoll;"
I love how the place where I would feel at uneasy random tension is now a place of sunshine and sanctity in my minds eye. Good luck! -
"Floating in the endless river of life,
awaken immersed in the sounds of a child's fife;"
this holds such innocence
"Floating in the endless river of life,
immersed in souls caught in strife;"
this actually makes me think as if there is a spiritual battle going on and everyone is stressed out... or something lol
these lines are so delicate and lovely yet strong and beautiful and the same time
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Ya..we all can relte with the moving streams of this life..and you too are in the same stream..very much philosophical tone..thanks..
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The sounding of your soul is heard here. A lovely sound. Good luck in the contest
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