i. Dressed-up lies and candy-coated words.
I used to finger-paint your name all over my walls in flourishing magentas and bright greens; but this was back when you actually tried, when you took the time out of your day to make mine ten times better. Back when I could rely on you and didn’t have to worry about you coming through. Sometimes, when I think about it, I ask myself if you had really been there at all, or if I made you up inside my head. Just another optical illusion to leave me dizzy and nauseous.
ii. Objects in mirror are closer than they appear.
I invited you inside the castle of my heart, shearing the stained ropes of its drawbridge so you could walk without tripping too hard. You asked me if I wanted to be treated like royalty. I replied no, I just want to be treated with respect. You laughed. My chest expanded so you could settle comfortably in-between my veins and I let myself relax because I thought you were there to stay. At some point, though, the dragon that guarded all my quirks was off duty, and you were finally given a chance to see how truly imperfect I am. I guess that’s why you ran.
Now, my castle is broken, and not even the strongest glue can fix it. I never should have let you inside in the first place.
iii. Hide and seek.
You pushed me to my limits, but sometimes it’s good to be brought that far, because it helped me find my way back to reality. Through this maze of torture I followed you with the eagerness and naivety of a child receiving a present for their birthday. But I’ve had enough and I am done. You pushed too many nails into my mind and crumbled the building blocks of my common sense. I’m too young to be stretched this much in so many different directions.
iv. Sometimes words don’t work.
My cheeks are once again flushed with contentment and I’ve paved over all the ruts you so lovingly plowed across my soul. I still feel a pang of nostalgia when I think of how I used to mean a little bit short of everything to you, yet a little bit more than “just friends”. I can’t help feeling bitter when your voice trails down my spine, haunting me, whispering how I am your everything, your entire life. All of these lines, yet you still couldn‘t find it in yourself to take better care of me. Well, I hope you know, that if your life ever ended up in my hands, I would drop it.
v. Break away.
Like wild ponies on a dusty beach, I run completely free. Maybe now, once you see me happy, you’ll finally realize that love cannot be bought.
I am ready for the next adventure; the ride has already begun.
Please tell me what you think
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I had the impression from the quotes for your contest we'd had similar romantic experiences, I'm now a little more concrete in that belief.
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amazing
i love your writing your a good writer.
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This is simply amazing. Wonderful imagery and fantastic emotional content
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The setup is wildly awesome.
Loved your work here, it's exquisite.
I was inspired by the "v. Break away."
Lovely job Bria! ♥
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So I was gonna comment on how amazing this poem was, but I think your friend beat me to it. What she said, and then some. "Shearing the stained ropes of its drawbridge." Ummm...wow. That's all I got. Wow. You never cease to amaze me with your writing, and I hope you never do. =)
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This was amazing.
And there really isn't much more to say.
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ohhmyygawddd.
First off, this poem is FUCKING amazinggg. You have nooo idea hoe. This spoke to me so much and just wow. You leave me in complete and utter awe each time you write something new. This is so brilliant and captivating. (:
Anyways. Pretty much loved the entire thing :] I especially love your metaphors and illuminating imagery, hoe. Intelligent use of them, really.
I used to finger-paint your name all over my walls in flourishing magentas and bright greens; but this was back when you actually tried, when you took the time out of your day to make mine ten times better. <--WHAT? holy fuckk. hahaha I LOVE that. It's so full of emotion and I love how you portrayed the image of 'how it used to be'. Amazinggg.
Back when I could rely on you and didn’t have to worry about you coming through. Sometimes, when I think about it, I ask myself if you had really been there at all, or if I made you up inside my head. Just another optical illusion to leave me dizzy and nauseous. <--& that is just whoaa. Me in a nutshell!? US in a nutshell? Once upon a time we could rely on them. Now, it's like why the hell did I bother to try? You're so strong, love. We've come a longgg way ! I also love the last sentence. It makes so much sense in such a poetical way. (:
The next stanza? That completely blew me away. I love the whole 'princess/castle/dragon' metaphor there, and how you related it so well to how you were feeling/felt. Genius ! (:
You pushed me to my limits, but sometimes it’s good to be brought that far, because it helped me find my way back to reality.<--& that just said it all. (: you really have a way with words, my dear. You spoke everything I felt in one single line. baha. Definitely one of my favorite lines.
Through this maze of torture I followed you with the eagerness and naivety of a child receiving a present for their birthday. But I’ve had enough and I am done. You pushed too many nails into my mind and crumbled the building blocks of my common sense. I’m too young to be stretched this much in so many different directions. <--& FUCK YES for moving on and being done with these boys ! (: I thought about everything today and wondered if I actually wanted him, or just the thought of him. Reading this actually made me realize that he did push too many nails into my mind and crumbled the building blocks of my common sense. [amazing line, by the way. my number one faveee ;)] but reading yer stuff really opens my eyes to a lot ! Ahhh. Brilliantbrilliantbrillianttt :D & the last line? Yeah. We are too young. We were meant to live for sooo much more<3My cheeks are once again flushed with contentment and I’ve paved over all the ruts you so lovingly plowed across my soul. I still feel a pang of nostalgia when I think of how I used to mean a little bit short of everything to you, yet a little bit more than “just friends”. <--hahaha. I love you (: I love the whole "cheeks are flushed with contentment" and the whole "nostalgia" thing. Incredible. And the last line hoe haha you hit the nail on the head with that one (:
Well, I hope you know, that if your life ever ended up in my hands, I would drop it. <--:D KUDOS TO YOU. I loveloveloveee that. Wow frank. Just wow. I love the control in that line.
Like wild ponies on a dusty beach, I run completely free. Maybe now, once you see me happy, you’ll finally realize that love cannot be bought.
I am ready for the next adventure; the ride has already begun. <--A great ending to one of my favoritest poems by youuu (: Gahh this was amazing hoe. Never stop writing hahaha I LOVE this. =]] & you, of course. :) ♥
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