If she knew what she wants,
Why would clear blue crystals fall from her eyes?
If she knew what she wants,
Would her breathing burn everytime you are near?
Strong and independent I thought she was,
A wit so bland my own tears stalled.
Then came you her shining knight.
I saw through that crack in your armour.
If she knew what she wants,
Why is every word about nothing but you?
If she knew what she wants,
Would you be able to hurt her so?
Once smiling and euphoric,
Now an empty shell.
You took the best of her and tore it apart.
Leaving only a cold reflection of what she used to be.
If she knew what she wants.
Why does she let you ruin what she is?
If she knew what she wants.
Would she let you tear it apart so easily?
Nothing left now but a doormat with no hope,
A mirror that does not reflect the true scene.
Emptiness, hollowness a black hole of nothingness,
Where once the brightest star shone.
If she knew what she wants,
Why doesn't she leave?
If she knew what she wants.
Why does she stay and cry?
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Comments
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Is she knew what she wants.
Would she let you tear it apart so easily?
Shouldn't that be if? And I think I read this before because everytime I see 'if she knew what she wants' I think of that song. Now I won't be able to get it out of my head, lol. IMO, the last line would be a bit better with 'why would' but that's just me. Great otherwise. ^_^ -
thi is so saddddd... i love it with a passion and it makes me think of a bad relationship with my boyfriend... i love it and thanks for posting this!!!!
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If she knew what she wants,
Why doesn't she leave?
If she knew what she wants.
Would she stay and cry?
So sad but true...loved your last lines. I wish it took less time for all of us to figure out what we wanted. Not that that would make things much easier, mind you. Getting what you want is a whole other story....
I like the metaphor in this poem and generally the whole concept. Nice take on the title.
thanks for the entry! -
i like it
well being that i am not a female, i can only relate on being with my ex, yet being oh so mistreated and not being able get the "balls" to say bye
in the end of it all i cried a lot, and near broke in to peices small as to fit through a neddles eye
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