Ah, thank you for this apple. Now I can see at last.
It's just clear cut; and don't take it badly, but, that's that, and thank you for observing it:
Good fences, good neighbors. Simple. Goes both ways. Now ... you wouldn't like it if I were hugging your wife when you walked into a room where you left us a moment before, would you? Come on ... tell the truth ...
Exactly. So, don't ask to be alone ... and I won't have to shove you to the floor and demand you get out before I kill you. See? Simple.
Mine, yours. See? Mine, yours. Leave my Eden and my Eve. Now we can be friends. Right, Love?
Right, Adam.
Now where did that new friend go?
Ah. Paradise regained!
At last.
Author notes
Sigh ... Oh, for a clairvoyant Adam!
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A contest entry
- Pure Fantasy in Imagination ..... by nature mithya.
650 points, ended February 20, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Life is sometimes a crying smile.
I was lucky to see this contest and very fortunate that my Eden spoke to me in audible whispers.
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Methinks God knew what was going to happen all along with a woman who couldn't follow directions and a man who couldn't say NO.... imagine that!!!
Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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This just shows that the whole thing is just imagination, doesn't it?
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Lol...
....eden before the knowledge from the apple after the apple was eaten only you know of sinster and adultarious motives.
So now when you have written your poem after eating the apple I must congratalute you for forgetting your Girl friend/Boy friend and the celebrity present in eden with you and remembering your adulturous neighbours. -
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But, Poet ...
don't you see? The "celebrity" is the very (de-)famous Devil; he is BOTH alien AND fake friend ... as it is in real life TOO; and my boyfriend is Adam. And of course ... I am the Ultimate Eve!
And of course he gave me the apple that mesmerizes me, and for my love Adam the apple that made him SEE. A little tongue-in-the-cheek devil's advocate (pun intended) simulation here ... See: if the devious and evil devil kept on his side of the border for Eden, and did not entice Ever Eve to sin, all would have been fine, not so? And if Adam resisted the offered bite, and put the blame where it is, life would have been heaven on earth. And ... and ... and ...!
I love this contest. It gives me de-LIGHT.
Well, you DID say use your imagination ... and did I not?
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Interesting thought
Well if the devil is your celebrity and your boyfriend Adam (with out having eaten the magical apple) It is only you, who know they could have sinned, really!
Wow great to know the devil without sin.
And to enjoy what you (after eating the apple) consider sin with out actually sinning. -
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Entangled in words ...
I saw a grim eye turned from sun's mirror.
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Yes, Adam needed discernment. Nice take on the happenings in the garden, refreshing write. Blessings.
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