Through the blinds
light streams in in horizontal streaks
across your naked skin.
Light and dark,
soft and delicate,
alternating,
illuminating,
shadowing,
intensifying the glow
the allure of your look.
You look at me
and pull the string to let in the light.
beauty shines
light on light
brighter and brighter,
revealing,
enticing,
foreshadowing
the fire within
the unspoken beauty of desire.
Through the blinds
light flashes onto warm porcelain beauty
awaiting my sweet caress
light and dark
tender and firm,
alternating,
dreaming,
realizing
carnal electricity burns
deliciously warm to the touch.
Close the blinds
and blind me with your light.
Author notes
Contest entry
A contest entry
- Through The Blinds - An Adult Contest by Dalaney.
975 points, ended February 9, 2009, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sensuality at its finest! The comparison/contrast is exceptional. The beauty in this poem creates wondrous images in my head. I love the last line and the sense of anxiousness in every stanza. Beauteous... in every sense of the word.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Well, I don't know what to say, I think you took my breath away.
Brilliant -
Dane this was incredible!
your choice of words for this beautiful masterpiece is
outstanding! congrats on the Bronze! well deserved !
Blessings
Rend
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I love this piece. the part that i enjoy the most is how you compare her beauty to light. and that even in complete darkness you still see the glow of her beauty. also the peek a boo... peeking through the blinds and how once she sees you she gives you what you were looking at fully, there is something about being watched that turns many on. good work
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i really like the cadence of this entry
Thank you so much for entering your poetry. Love, Lane
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I love the last line
So sensual and warm... very nice
Stacy
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This was very soft yet sensual. A beauty all it's own.
The last lines were a prfect ending, for she can shine more light with just a sweet smile.
Lovely,
~Lisa~
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Not bad, not bad at all! I like this.
All the best,
mj.
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