This is my suicide letter
For those of you who care.
And those who don't,
I blame this on you.
I hope that it weighs heavily on your conscience,
But i'm pretty sure that it wont.
You who continuously stuck a knife in my wounds;
Not caring what it does to me,not caring about my feelings.
I am a trinket that you callously move to the back of the shelf,
Only wanting me when it benefits yourself.
If you never had faith in me
How the hell was I supposed to have faith in myself.
Your selfishness impeded my selflessness.
All I ever wanted is for you people to care.
Now the hole in my heart brings about sorrows that I can no longer bare.
Hurt feelings now getting so heavy I can't even breath;
No longer able to swim in this sea of sadness.
The undertow in this current of loneliness is pulling me down,
To a dark and desolate land of solitude.
If you would have just asked me to stay
Maybe my heart would'nt be so frayed.
The hurt I've hidden so long under lock and key
Is now open and on full display.
I feel no one really cares for me.
Just passing moments when you pretend to.
Distortions in reality make me lose my way.
Lost myself somewhere on life's never ending road
There is no more roads, this is my dead end.
I have nothing left: no hope,no will to go on,
No life,no love,no family,no friends.
For those of you who do care, I'm sorry.
For those of you who don't, I hope you realize what your missing without me.
A contest entry
- Abuse, Death, Pain by psychomonkey.
550 points, ended October 29, 146 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love it. The only thing that caught me was your plural usage. "There is no more roads," is a good example! Watch your usage! Otherwise this piece was grand!
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This is scarily good. Many people feel like this so many times... including myself. So for all of us out there who have experienced it but never been able to put it into words, I thank you for you have done the near impossible. Keep writing and pull through again. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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OMG! Don't do it!
lol, good write.
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Forgot to applaud!
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Hey, I really liked this piece. I thought that it was full of emotion and definitely there were parts in there that I too feel at times, so I can relate. I also liked the metaphors and some of the words that you chose to explain how you feel. Anyways, it was dark, great, and definitely real. Nice job!
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a little bit cliche but the emotion was definitely there. perhaps change up a few words and format it a little more?
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wow this is a very well written poem. I must say that it is one of the saddest pieces I've ever read. Good luck in all of your contests. I have high hopes for you.
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Amazing
I am not sure what to say, but it is an amazing poem . Very dark and real. -
"I am a trinket that you callously move to the back of the shelf," I'm sorry, as sad and scarey as this piece is, that line was awesome!
I hope this really is just for contest and not true feelings, it sure felt real... but i hope we can keep death in print and not checkout early. much love and respect
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wow... i don't know what to say this is probably one of the greatest poems i've read in a while. it was wonderfuly written. I wish u luck on ur contest
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Thank you very much.I'm glad you liked it...
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upper Tier
As always, good piece. getting better with those punctuations
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wow this is great, i've felt this way so many time, i can't even count how many
i though this was full of emotion and i great write
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you are a really good writer and man a lot of us feel alone,, but you mentioned that you had friends so you are lucky
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