"I'm fine, go on, have your fun"
Famous last words,
Bitter on my tongue,
They burrow down my throat,
And catch fire in my lungs,
My heart starts burning next,
With the pain of a witch's hex,
Inflamed by all the fears and doubts,
Won't someone,
Anyone,
PLEASE PUT ME OUT!!
Of this misery,
It's a mystery,
How I ever could have let it get this bad.
After all of the love, and the friends I thought I had...
Now a shell,
Walking ashes,
The pulsing coal,
That is my heart,
Breaks free from this frame,
AND CRASHES!
Like waves on the edge,
Of a pool of your tears,
After just a few short years,
You isolated me...
Now you will pay the toll,
BURN LIKE ME...
stop...drop... and fold.....
Author notes
I hope you like it, else whise you'll remove it, i haven't written dark much lately, but overall dark is my style so i figured i would wing it for this one. thanks for the inspiration either way.
A contest entry
- Ever feel abandoned by the world? by Rejected Easter Egg.
862 points, ended February 15, 13 entries
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Wow. I would never steal anyones material. I am highly against that, but if I did, this would be it. Im seriously serious. It's that good. Props to you, my Genius.
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fantastic, M
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this flows wonderfully. nice write!
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Loved it
I thought that you used enough raw emotion and imagery to make this write very dark. I know what you felt like in this poem. I myself have felt like this too many times to count. Good Luck in the contest.
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Wow. This is great. The raw emotion is very nicely played out in your wording. The imagery was wonderful; the words just flowed so beautifully and intensely. As the reader I could feel what you were portraying in this poem.
Wonderful write and good luck in the contest!
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