I've torn into my shoulders, with the sufferings sustained
Buckling underneath, both knee caps gave away,
Wrapping arms around myself, so no one else can see,
The fractured pieces of my heart, the fragile tears I bleed.
I call myself by name, and listen to the lure,
Of escaping all the silence, I've rejectedly endured.
Whispering "I love you too", I watch my hollowed eyes,
Weeping in the mirror of my dissaproving lies.
A grave and bitter frown, wrapped up with bows of gold,
Becomes the present of my past, the only smile I'll know.
Cracking through the years, with every passing breath,
Till I walk the frozen valley of my everlasting death.
-Dorick
A contest entry
- Ever feel abandoned by the world? by Rejected Easter Egg.
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Comments
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This is great stuff enjoyed the perspective of reflection of oneself, and the consequences of emotion.
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wow. i mean wow. you managed to rhyme it subtly and your descriptions were fantastic. i love a poet who knows how to use his words. seriously, well done. thank you so much for entering in my contest and absolutely keep writing!
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Whoa
Loved the ending there. The rest of this was awesome, really took my breath away.
In a way it kind of reminded me of a dark fairytale, of something that really can't be described. Anyways good luck in the contest, although you deserve it.
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Wow....
that about sums it up
-Faded
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