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I Promise You Walls

Don’t come to me
With twinkling eyes
Who am I to deceive?
With nothing to disguise

I promise you walls

I swear to you entrapment
Suffocating smothering without escape
Mental travesty and dismemberment
Whilst I seal off your heart’s thumping gates

Pique my interest at your own peril
And you will traverse my emotional desert
A frozen wasteland, my version of hell
Strewn with muses’ corpses that I drain and desert

I pledge to you insecurity

The ball and chain of viral affection
Four padded walls of my deprived prison
Only to find my love be an infection
As you rot away to my heart’s morose indecision

Bound and gagged by my aggression
Flogged for my apathy and disdain
No amnesty for your honesty and confession
Believe me; you’ll grow to love the pain

Come to me if you must
As I groan in disgust

I vow depravation
I guarantee infuriation
I assure no escape at all

Solemnly

I promise you walls.

Author notes

To the curse of love and the reality of relationships...none are fairy tales and fewer are truely happy.

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  • littlewing
    February 17

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    Wow

    This poem shows one the true side of love. It doesn't lie or pretend or fake. It tells it how it is....
    I Enjoyed it
    -littlewing


  • ChelleAmy
    February 14
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    Wow, some of the wording in here is exceptional.

    Chelle xo


  • gracebyblood
    February 12
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    I really really love this. The concept is amazing.
    awesome work.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    February 6

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    I agree, No relationship is a fairy tale, and fewer are truly happy. I knew what this was about, within the first few lines. I read it to my husband, and he thought it was about prison. I really enjoyed the analogies you used, as it added to the imagery of this piece. Great Write!


  • faerie
    February 4

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    I really liked this peice, it really impressed with with your sparotic use of rhyme and I enjoyed most all of the metophors.

    incredible.


  • Carpe Noctem
    February 4

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    I really liked this. It was very different from what I was expecting and from the other entries. It is also sadly, very true. I loved this line most:

    "Strewn with muses’ corpses that I drain and desert"

    You brought powerful images to the brain, to accompany your words. Well done! Thanks for entering, and best of luck!

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