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A Little Pea (short story)

Every week the sign was changed. “Only 6 weeks until Spring!” Five, four, three, two...  When I could resist no longer, I clomped my dun boots, thick winter coat and pale face into a local outlet of Paradise!

Mingled fragrances of sweet flowers and damp, rich soil wafted from hundreds of flats of pansies, primroses, and potted daffodils displayed on aromatic redwood tiers. Flower faces seemed to smile cheerfully as they waited for the lucky shopper whose yard they would grace.

I fingered the bills in my pocket. I could get one of the pansy six-packs, and still have enough to buy the seeds I had come for. I searched until I found one that called my name more loudly than the rest, then moved on to the seed section. The bulk seeds were the most economical.  From large bins I selected brown paper bags of peas, beets, and carrots. The wait in line didn’t seem long, as every lungful drawn in here felt lush with life.

I got my purchases to the car, and thought I would make a restroom run, but promptly changed my mind when the dashboard clock lit up. Late again!

And I knew darn well that a very impatient teenager would be waiting at home for the family car. She had most ungraciously agreed that I might take it, as long as I had it back by a certain minute she expected it to be available for her activities.

I rushed directly home, pulled around the corner in our subdivision, and was frankly surprised not to see said daughter standing on the front porch with a large stopwatch and look of fury. I pulled into the drive, and weakly hoped that she might not even be aware that I was at least five minutes later than agreed.

I hopped out of the car and went to the passenger side to retrieve my items. There was a small hole in one of the bags, and a little green pea had escaped onto the seat. I was suddenly overwhelmed with an irresistible impulse.

Setting the garden things down on the lawn, I ran up the steps as my firstborn child swung the door open. I shame-facedly explained, “I knew you were waiting, so I didn’t stop even though I really needed to ‘go’. I’m so sorry, but there’s a little pea on the front seat. I’ll get a paper towel and clean it up. It will only take a moment!”

“Mother! That is so gross! How could you do this to me?!? You knew I was leaving right away!” She turned, a black cloud with lightning bolts, and thundered down the steps as I came running back out with my paper towel.

She swung the car door open and stood there, wordlessly looking at the seat. I came up behind her, and looking over her shoulder noticed that not only one, but two peas had escaped! I exclaimed, “Oh dear! There’s twice as much as I thought!” She silently moved aside, and I picked up my escapees with the paper towel. She didn’t even look at me as she stalked to the driver's side and got in. I closed the passenger door, and collapsed onto the lawn in gales of laughter as she drove away!



Author notes

She later confessed to having almost choked, trying not to laugh until she was out of sight. Ah, so much was beneath her dignity in the teen years!

**Nymph-Angel, I posted a previous version of this at Storywrite. I re-edited it before submitting it to your contest. I thought you should know, in case you are only accepting writes entirely written since you posted your contest.

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  • Rovingone gold member
    March 5

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    How ungrateful of her. You race home to bring her the car and she can't even share a little humor with mom. Well, what is this world coming to?


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 26
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    Hahaha! Oh, this is precious! Well done, and congrats on the Bronze!


  • Travel Notes
    February 26

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    Hehehe This is great. Strong from finish to end with great visuals throughout the whole thing. I think my favorite part is imagining the daughter in the driveway with the big stopwatch and furious, like a cartoon, but so close to reality making it all the better. I'm a teenager too and I can soooo picture this happening between me and my mom. haha Thanks for mentioning that this already exsited before this contest. I only didn't allow prewrites to keep from being flooded with nothing but entries that didn't fit the prompt and have already been entered in five other contests, but since your entry exsisted before on a completly different site and not on AP, then I'm ok with it


  • Nickelspring gold member
    February 5

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    Oh, you got me again. Truly wonderful story. I could smell the "outlet of Paradise", see the bins of seeds. I enjoyed the reaction of a put-out teenager almost as much as the pea itself. Great discriptions and word choices.
    KW~


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    February 4

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    I loved this story when I read it on Storywrite, and I love it even more now. Wonderful description of the garden center, and hilarious joke, too!

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