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Orchestrated Death

The pale white horse's rider,
Composes his constant masterpiece;
The tune is so eloquently constructed,
Ready for its next musical release.
His audience are not always willing,
Forced to listen to his fiery chords;
His musicians play fiercely,
Delivering listeners to their lords.
There's no escaping his song,
He's written it just for you;
Sit down and enjoy your musical,
There's nothing more you can do.
It is his orchestra,

Delivering you your last breath;

Welcome the forced notes,

For the composer is Death.

Author notes

A metaphorical refrence to your life being a musical, awaiting the last note to be played by Death's Orchestra. No fat lady singing here, the end is when he delivers you.

Silvos.

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  • Wow, very brilliant, I enjoyed this
    Very well versed


  • HarvesterOfHearts
    February 10

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    What if Death IS a fat lady? ... Naw, i can't see it either.

    Anyways it is a really good analogy, and spin on the life is like, type deal. I like it though. Like a musical... hmm.

    Also you pulled the poem off real well, but seeing as YOU are the one that wrote it, it's no real surprise.

    Also the part of the fiery chords. Yes, you use fire and Death together often don't you? I like it, it always adds to the poem, makes it painful, and deadly.

    Good Job!

    ~theharvester <--- For Realz?


  • Emm Jayy
    February 5
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    Wow. This is a great metaphor, and it flowed so well. Amazing poetry!
    Emmz