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Bronze...Hurting Storm

My old umbrella is leaking

I need shelter from the storm

The wind is cold and drafty

your love will make me warm

 

The rain is falling harshly

the drops eat at my skin

Will you cuddle me in your arms

so this current crisis will end

 

Hug me until the storm stops

let me know I will not die

Reassure me that our rainbow

will arc lengthy across the sky

 

Pray the sun will shine again

that God will stop this falling rain

Tell me you will love me forever

free my caring heart of this pain

 

 

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  • Beret55 silver member
    February 12, 2009
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    Very well done. Rhyme and rythem very good. Rain comes in many forms..

  • Rambunctious
    February 6, 2009

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    And.. After any storm, either there is a rainbow or the sun shines, sweetening the air with the perfume of flowers that are drunk on heaven's tears..

    A lovely poem and my loudest applause!

    Ron.

  • Papagallo
    February 5, 2009

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    This is beautiful. May youfind such love and shelter from the rain. We all have a leaky umbrella, but not many of us find someone to patch the leaks.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    February 4, 2009

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    Oh my. This is lovely. Beautiful imagery, One thing though, The third Stanza, last line, Did you mean arc or arch? Other than that, I truly loved this piece! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!


  • arafura
    February 4, 2009
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    Well done!

  • Bob Fox
    February 4, 2009
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    And

    May the wind whisper your name. Just lovely poet.

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