Boredom played
with styrofoam.
I traced poetry
in smoke rings.
Espresso stained
his white blazer.
Alert eyes demanded
the sponge.
Author notes
Prompt: Coffee and Cigarettes
20 Words
In a list
A contest entry
- quickie IX by Salty Hibiscus.
350 points, ended February 4, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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i like it... you know you should write about this "he" and yourself in a novella form! i think that would be grand, at least for a fan... oh yes!
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not bad
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Hey Y...
Brilliant images
Great creativity... I loved this one a lot
Keep writing
Love
Kiddy -
Wonderful
I believe that you really put forth a vivid portrait with well chosen words, strong imagery, easy cadence and structure... just plain good and deserving of the gold trophy from deaf and silent!!!
bj
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Lovely imagery!
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nice one babe.
ezza -
wow, this is amazing!
beautiful imagery throughout, you've managed to say such a lot in so few words. I always find guys that smoke attractive
i dunno why. There's something about it that looks nice.
congrats on the gold, well deserved.
ElectricBloom
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Oh, wow this is good!
"I traced poetry in smoke rings." love that line
congrats on your trophy...very shiney
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Congrats on the win.
Nice work.
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I traced poetry
in smoke rings.
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wow i actually felt that when i was bored at work. needed something to keep me awake and caffeine and nicotine were the answer. great take on the prompt and thanks for sharing. good luck.
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20 well worded words
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yes (:
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absolutely perfect!
this piece went well with the prompt and the words you chose were excellent!
so good to see something penned from my twin again!!
hugggsss
becca
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a wonderful take on the promt good luck in the contestmaralisa
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