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Tell Me, What Do I Do?





Do I trust these feelings,
these daydreamed perceptions,
premonitions,
prophesies
nagging for explanation; 

Do I turn right
for the unwritten
or left for “them”,

or should I simply
stay standing
on this concrete corner
widow shopping disguises
that I might look good in your eyes?

Tell me, what do I do?

Because
when I close my eyes,
claw past the distractions,
surrender frustrations…

when insecurity
finely gives way
to silence
and I can breathe;

I find you
waiting for me
in a place
that is all I have ever wanted.

So tell me,
what do I do?














Author notes

Prompt: "[caution.]trouble ahead."

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  • PixieWannabe
    March 21
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    Excellent write, congratulations on the trophy you deserve it for this powerfully writtern piece.

  • Jason-R-Britt
    March 20
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    Bravo! Wonderful poem written brilliantly.


  • honeybrown
    March 20

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    amazing!

    I read this through teared eyes. I was so captivated by your words! I felt I was there on that corner and when the fog lifted it was a glorious feeling. Truely a great write. I never know how to make that apparent
    Thanks for sharing!
    TIffany


  • goneforever12
    March 19

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    wow

    i like it, it sounded like me in 8th grade but not no more...anyways it was a great poem
    keep it up!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 19
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    Excellent work. You have written frustration with capital letters and brought this piece forward with so much emotion is makes one simply embrace the talent.

    So very pleased to see a trophy and a spotlight on this gem. Congratulations dear soul. Well done. ~Pamela

  • SadmanJim
    March 19

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    How?

    How in God's name did you manage to write about how I feel?
    "when insecurity
    finely gives way
    to silence
    and I can breathe;

    I find you
    waiting for me
    in a place
    that is all I have ever wanted."
    This poem reads as personal, yet universal at the same time. Thank you for a wonderful write.

    Write On!
    jIM


  • estbelle gold member
    March 19

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    I ditto red handed, felt the same way myself

    or should I simply
    stay standing
    on this concrete corner
    window shopping disguises
    that I might look good in your eyes?

    love this part
    window shopping disguises
    is an amazing line
    belle


  • aslanlight
    March 19

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    I curently relate to this; well perhaps most of the time! Insecurity's a creeping feeling that's hard to shift and you've expounded it extremely well.

    Peace Georgia


  • redhanded
    February 6

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    oh wow this is good! it explains alot of how I feel right now thanks so much for your entry and best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
    andi
    (redhanded)

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