with a smile
i read someone 'hearts' me
with love and a cherished palm-print
written over and over
blackfelt pen on the envelope
thickening of paper and my tree comes to mind
inside a garden in louisana
time moves us like shadow boxes
along a brick wall
where memories are solid and sound
somewhere; in new york
a girl who wears funky hats
sits quiet at a desk and smiles too
she has inbred light
and the same hands as me
on her desk sits an empty mug
with a telling swirl of coffee grounds
the only difference
she likes hers sweet
and i take mine sugar-free
Author notes
for suzi
A contest entry
- Tea at 7:50? by J.J. Sass.
2250 points, ended February 28, 2009, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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aww gill, what a lovely little tribute to suzi! I'm sure she enjoyed this, as did I. Thanks so much for entering.
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It seems to me that there are some ways in which we will always stand alone in this world... but it's only from here, I think, that we are able to appreciate the most precious value in true friendship; a value which is greater than the 'aloneness' yet still respecting and accepting this right of individuality.
'hearts me' ... I much like the way this quality has been expressed, without being defined into a labelled box.
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Awww, this makes me smile
Shucks you two! 
This explains why you have yours sugar-free - you already got enough sweetness 
It is a beautiful poem
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and i raise my cup to both of you, gilly. beautiful poetry that shines with that special closeness that exists among soul mates
... this is lovely and precious - just like you
~ Nicolette
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I'd say this is the "january thaw"!
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What a sweet, thoughtful write. Suzi must've been tickled.
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you may not take sugar in your coffee but you put plenty sweet in your valentine.
Lisa
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hahahhaha valentine's... i never thought like that...
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You paint poignantly with love and light and enable the reader to both see and feel this connection that is as close as a warm thought. Delightful.
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wow.. i love this. absolutely love it
m
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yep that girl is sweet and so is this poem missy C
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this poem so fully encapsulates Suzi's presence. ...this is a very sweet & beautiful poem.
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time changes us and all, but it teaches too and sometimes we learn the really important things of life...beautiful poetry here... a lot of "heart" in this poem...PK
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that is 'life' and 'love' as labled. your hands across the water posey uses a lot of folded, internal things like envelope, inside the garden, palm-print, etc. that make me think of places in the heart, not just louisana, but grounds in a mug and the sweetness of friendship. -sweetnlowfish
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i like sweetnlow on my cornflakes, now that im mainly sugar-free - mostly
thankie swimmingpoolnurseyfish
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love you, lady
more letters will come
I think they are just the medicine we need.
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good good good medicine
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awwww
i heart you both
lol
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i heart you too
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THIS IS SO CUTE!!! i like it sweet too shewoman!! i love you!
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