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what do you know about depression?
about exhaustion?
about knowing exactly what is wrong
and not being able to help yourself?

what do you do when you've got so much to say
but you need someone to listen?
someone who can deal with you
your stormy moods
when you're tripping with happiness
one moment
and crying the next

what do you do when you've shut yourself down
so you don't annoy your friends?
when you crave company so much
but get bored with people in five minutes?

what do you do when you just stop caring
even though you want to so badly?
who do you turn to
when you're scared of dying alone?

who do you tell
when you've never told anyone
anything
ever
before?

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  • FightOffYourDemons
    July 26

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    It kinda does fit. It sounds like the person in the poem has created an empty life for themselves. I think I would have liked it more if there was just a few lines that were answers and not question but I guess if you have no clue about the answers yourslef than it is hard to put them in your poem. I can feel the emotion in this and I appreciate that.
    Good job at thinking outside the box and great poem.

    Thanks

    Nikki


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    May 20

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    gold. i mean it...... you win gold.
    i am there, i know what it feels like it. you reached me, and achieved the whole point of this contest. i'll have to give you silver just because this is a prewrite but.... man.


  • Violent Glass
    May 4

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    i wish i knew what to do... most the time i fake it, i puton my mask with its painted smile and try to be someone happy....
    this is beautifully written!
    i loved it!
    thanx ofr sharing it with me


  • A. Lee S.
    April 15

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    What else can you do...

    but take a good long look in the mirror and tell yourself you'll be alright. Tell yourself, no matter how many times you'll stumble, you'll always be there to pull yourself back up on your feet.

    First and foremost; believe in yourself. You are the only one who will always be there. You might let yourself down occassionally but don't take it personally; failure is the essence of humanity. It seems to be how we learn and grow stronger so we may as well embrace it.

    Take pride in your uniqueness; comfort in your achievements (however small they might appear); and the world of criticism as a healthy sprinkling of salt. It's flavoring; some too bitter; others too sweet... and not one of them able to change the taste of any delicasies you might attribute.

    When you believe in yourself; others will too. When things go poorly you'll realize... it doesn't change you. It might slow you down a bit so... that thing about patience being a virtue... is true.

    Only don't be too serene; life is for the taking. It doesn't come to you. Go and get it... and that is why I bothered to write. The fire and passion in you is unmistakable. Don't just hold on to your dreams... they are yours... go chase them down.

    I liked the poem. I've always found such crossroads to be inspiring. Challenges and the unknown are the spice of life. If it we didn't have uncertainties, inadequacies and hills to overcome; it wouldn't be called life. Too many of us live like linear equations believing a devout formula will bring purpose. I think purpose starts with freedom of choice.

    Best of luck to you and yours.


  • Aajdj
    April 3
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    pray


  • stargardt13
    March 15

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    wow i love how you described everything.This poem was amazing to read and easy to relate to! thanks for entering my contest.


  • your angers a gift
    February 23

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    wow! I could relate to this alot! very nicely written! You described the feeling very well! great write! Thanks for entering. Good luck!


  • Lady Michaella
    February 6
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    wow... this is amazing. im so sad after i read this. the sad thing is i can relate to this almost perfectly. infact perfectly. only im not depressed and i like my friends. but still.. i cant tell them things. they just dont care. i cant tell my mum or family. it sucks. this poem is beautiful and really well done. so sad.

    -Lemon Bee-
    xx

  • crosscountry07
    February 4

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    Are you really going through what you've written? Because if you are...I know exactly how you feel.It might not be pound for pound exactly the same situation, but I've asked these same questions and that stanza that begins with shutting yourself down, well, I've been there and done that. And though we don't really know each other, if you need someone to listen just IM me, because I know how it feels to have no one listen to you. Keep your head up, and awesome write! -Liz

    • cirque du soleil
      February 5
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      thanks for ur support..right now at this moment I'm okay :-) i have good days and bad days..it's pretty unpredictable..i will IM you if i need to talk thanks :-)

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