Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Better than this

I know
    I will
be home
      Tonight.
I can breathe
                          I
  can run wild.
                        Will
I succeed?
                        Run
from your monsters
                        Because
                        there
                          is
                          much
                        better
                          Than
                          This.
I can do
better than this.

Author notes

...?

What do you think? Anything I can work on?

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6
  • aaaaaaaa
    February 4, 2009

    Edit | Reply
    Hello Aleksandria Stanley, this is remarkable. You have written something that completely blew the socks off my feet after I was done reading... and that's a pretty amazing thing considering I wasn't wearing any socks, or wait that's my underwear. Well never mind about that. I think I need to go.


    • LostInAdulthood
      February 4, 2009
      Edit | Reply
      THank you for the...um...comment, lol.

    • ElectricBloom
      February 4, 2009
      Edit | Reply
      Wow dude,
      you took your pants off?
      She's only 15!
      You're sick.

      • aaaaaaaa
        February 4, 2009
        Edit | Reply
        It was an involuntary action of which was so monstrous that it exploded my clothes off of my body. And don't call me dude dude. What do you want, to sniff them? Get out of my grill shortie!

        • ElectricBloom
          February 4, 2009
          Edit | Reply
          Yeah, and I think we all know what else exploded out of your body.

          SICK DUDE. SICK.

          • aaaaaaaa
            February 4, 2009
            Edit | Reply
            Yes, sympathy is currently exploding out of my body because you have a mosquito bite for a brain.

1 - 6 of 6