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Me, You and society

What is this society thinking
where is the world we know
are love for each-other is sinking
and the money tree will grow

Teenagers sniffing drugs
are world is a washing up sink
and we have pulled the plug
we need to listen and think

Media is power-full than ever
have you got a Nintendo ds
but the old fun games outdoor
is now a percentage less

The kids are more greedy , it's true
and the bank are getting muddled up
and all of this is evolving round you
yep , human brains will never stop

 

everyone has so much similarity lets get along as Karl Marx has dreamt be a loving world we shall attempt me and you and society

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A look on society!

A contest entry

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  • The Wayword Warrior
    February 8, 2009

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    View from a kid!

    Hi Lana, I dont share Tammy's view that you are parroting me and dad, because we know how big ure heart is and that you are deeply concerned about humans and the planet ureself, you express it all the time! Of course the reference to Marx is cos you have picked it up from us but thats how all learning happens anyway... Maybe Tammy thinks that this poem doesnt express ure personal feelings as much but I think its gr8 that you are interested in social life and problems X


  • StormyDawn
    February 4, 2009
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    Very powerful. Best of luck


  • BellaAmare
    February 4, 2009
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    Nicely done.

    I blame the Devil for all of this mess. I understood your poem, but 1John 5:19 says: "We know we all originate with God but the whole world is lying in the power of the wicked one." And Revelation 12:9 explains how "he was hurled down to earth, banned from heaven, filled with Great anger knowing he has a short time on earth left. "

    Well done.


  • ConjurerCaptainTam
    February 4, 2009

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    okay lana, this is really good, but you're kind of parroting dad and nima abit (do you even know who karl marx is and what his philosophies entail?)

    On the other hand, i have to admit, i really love these lines in particular, "have you got a Nintendo ds
    but the old fun games outdoor
    is now a percentage less"

    weldone anyways

    big sis, tam x

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    February 4, 2009

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    An excellent look on society, Lana. Nothing could be truer and more plain. Thanks for sharing.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Brian

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