shadows fall across my brow,
whilst the churning seas beneath my feet
sing in tune with the harp of tempest.
sadness lowers its curtain
around my soul,
so thin is the line
between desire and deception.
loneliness and fear take hold,
drawing me to the edge of insanity's grasp.
yet there, shining in the distance,
hidden amongst the echoes
of tears shed long ago,
is the light of redemption.
finally there comes a shallow smile,
for I am to be born anew.
Author notes
image prompt: provided by host - as appears on this page.
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture inspired by serenity silvermoon.
500 points, ended February 4, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest Best Prewrites From February 2009 by amaranthine lover.
1125 points, ended March 12, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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This one really is so very touching and makes you realize how fragile the mind really can be...
"sadness lowers its curtain
around my soul,
so thin is the line
between desire and deception."
I love those lines...
Once again, excellent, Cuz!
Lynda
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Wow!!! Where do I start???
First of all, the background is beautiful and seems to be perfect for the picture.
The poem is wonderful and overflows with emotional imagery. I LOVE the last lines!
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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