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Path to the Sky



Heavenly sky,
As I think of you.
The steps are the path,
The path you walked.
Eyes filling with water,
I know you are in a better place.
Voices are heard in the back of my mind,
Memories shared between us.
Let me so love,
Let me so cry,
Let me so grieve.

Years have passed.
Yet I still think of you.
A sad day,
Where you were met by God,
A devoted dog like you,
Gone, just like that.
It was very peaceful,
Eternal pain exiting the body,
Now filled with warmth, love and joy.

God picked you up for he knew,
He knew you were hurting.
So he reached out his hands,
Left you from your suffering...
Giving all you had to this world.

Remember to smile,
That is what gets us through each day.
The love from our loved ones is strong,
Look up to the sky because someone is always watching.

Author notes

*~*~ Rest In Peace -Devin ~*~*
Evolence -I am terribly sorry for your loss.
Written February 19th, 2004

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  • wingdreams
    December 8, 2005
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    Anyone who has ever known the unconditional love a faithful dog knows they have lost a companion when that animal passes on. I too have experienced this loss and it still touches me deeply when I think of my dog that I had for 17 years.

    Keep writing.


  • crystaldust gold member
    March 29, 2005
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    crystaldust 29-03-05 15:45
    I think both your poems about Tasha a really beautiful. I loved my dog too and was able to talk to her as she drifted away into the world of spirit. It's over 10 years ago now, but I still think of her every day and talk to her too. I love your poems and hope to be able to write something for your birthday.


  • Sensual Sapphire
    January 13, 2005
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    This shows so much love and a giving heart. You will one day be reunited with your beloved friend, until then may the memories keep you warm.


  • date-magdalena
    June 28, 2004
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    this is very beautiful, it spoke to my heart and i'm glad you can smile and feel that you're not alone. i wish more than anything for a sign from my love, but i don't feel him and am frustrating because i want to know if he's ok and that he's by my side, but i never feel him.. very beautiful writing,, i loved it..
    magdalena


  • S A Adelmann
    March 31, 2004
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    This is such a nice sentiment - I have made befriended many dogs over the years, and I miss them all. well said, Thank you.

    Scott


  • Applesauce
    March 27, 2004
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    a very nice write here. I miss her so much. Thanks for the comfort and good luck ! ( nice picture and backgournd BTW )

    ~*)()(baby girl)()(*~


  • Roseleaf
    March 12, 2004
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    divine love

    this is a beautiful dedication of much love for your treasured Devin very touching piece indeed and sure that God has a special love for her too as love only strenghtens the space within heaven and earth

    pauline
    Edited on Mar 12, 11:11 p.m. because 'for her and I am sure she did And believe all children should have a pet '.


  • cherche -d -ame
    March 12, 2004
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    very touching and 5 star write

    What a lovely poem to your pet companion , and how fitting the pic is . If i am not mistaken it is the one that portrays the rainbowbridge they say our pets cross as they leave this world behind . My heart goes out to you . I am an animal lover myself , have 2 cats , 1 dog and 1 McCaw parrot . My dog ( a Siberian Husky ) is getting up in age , he is moving a bit slower because of arthritis and I dread the day when his time on this earth is up . Hopefully we will be granted a few more good years with him . He is still in great spirits and his pain is under control . But he is alrady past the age that the experts predict for his breed . Anyway , I know your dog will always be a part of you , and now you must imagine him romping around accross that rainbowbridge playing with all kinds of other once very loved pets , and seeing his world in colors . That is another thing they say....accross that bridge our pets can finally see colors , here on this earth they claim that they only see black and white ,

    Reenie


  • PrincessOfFire
    March 9, 2004
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    The love from our loved ones is strong,
    Look up to the sky because someone is always watching.
    so true these words are. this is insirational and beautifully written. the flow is so smooth. Thank you for sharing.


  • Danna Hobart
    March 9, 2004
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    This is a beautiful apostrophe poem. lovely images, and a very moving tone. I have way too many pets up there staring down at me. (We lived by a very busy road)


  • Chilko
    March 9, 2004
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    Aww, this is so heartfelt and sad. I'm sorry to hear of the loss of your pup. I have a dog, ( well, she's more of my brother's dog, but anyways) and she's part of the family to us. So are my horses, Levi and Spoke, my donkey, our cat and even our goats. I know how horrible it is to lose your pets. I wrote a poem about my first horse when he died of colic, but it wasn't nearly as good as this. I hope you keep writing, in happier circumstances, Muchas Amor, Mandy


  • fixnwrtr
    March 9, 2004
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    At first I thought you were talking about someone you knew and loved who had finally succumbed to cancer and passed on. The one little line "...a devoted dog like you..." threw me. I had to read it twice. But in many families a dog is a member of the family and not just a pet. This is very sweet and poignant. Only one thing -- "...Years have past..." I think you mean Years have PASSED. Past is time and tense, passed is gone. I had to read it twice to understand what you mean. It was a bit of a jolt. But otherwise, the poem flows well and is sweet and sad and hopeful.

  • Dorkette2
    March 9, 2004
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    This was very sweet, i really enjoyed it, dogs are truly man's best friend and i think they are superior to cats in every way cuz thier always there. Great write.
    Brooke

  • Meld
    March 9, 2004
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    Very wonderful tribute to your dog. It's so sad to lose a pet. A very touching and beautiful poem. I'm sure your beloved dog is watching you from above.


  • March 9, 2004
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    im so sorry
    but its good that you took a bad experience and made it into something beautiful
    its a nice poem
    it really is


  • Bertie
    February 28, 2004
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    This was truly a great dedication for you lost pup. I love animals as well. I have 3 dogs now and they are all my babies. spoiled rotten LOL. It' difficult when you lose anyone you love be it a pet or a human. I'm sorry for your loss.

    Hugs
    Bertie

  • Inner Thoughts
    February 21, 2004
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    Excellent

    Nelak -Wow, this totally suprised me. Beautiful write. The picture is excellent. It seemed like you picked the picture and wrote from how you perceived it. It is very sad.
    "God picked you up for he knew,
    He knew you were hurting.
    So he reached out his hands,
    Left you from your suffering…
    Giving all you had to this word."
    I liked that, it has so much meaning. Well deserved. Good luck in the contest, this is a winner.

    Take care,
    ~Inner Thoughts


  • JPLimin
    February 20, 2004
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    wonderful tribute, our pets are our family, they do so many things with us and are such apart of our daily lives and are surely missed after they pass away, well done Ms. Nelak ... JP *s*

  • Applesauce
    February 20, 2004
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    First let me say that the picture and bg are great and went so wonderfully with the poem, which was fantastic, this poem really made my night, i hate spending time with my family and i had to do some stuff with them last night, i came home and saw this, and had a really big comment, but they kicked me off before it went through, this poem ias what i was looking for and i know you put time and effort into it, im sorry i did'nt answer your question sooner, but you did everything right anyways, thanks so much for entering, good luck! i know her parents are going to love all these poems

    ~*)()(baby girl)()(*~


  • dlbrown
    February 20, 2004
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    Nelak, I can't begin to tell you how this timely poem, has touched me, a beloved dog of my adult son was suddenly killed by a car last night, Brownie was his best friend, and companion for 11 years, and beloved by all in this family. I stood vigil as my two adult sons broke through the frozen ground to bury her broken body, 'twas a day of horrible saddness, as a grown man cried, when he laid his faithful dog into the ground with her ball, and a rose. I had written a poem for a contest ("They say that Eyes are the window of the soul") about Brownie's picture, hauntingly put on previously by my son's wife, my words were of a happy live dog, written just hours before this tragic event. Was it prophetic, was it premonition, or God's warning? To read this wonderful poem of yours on this day is, oh, so bitter sweet... To see Brownie, and read her life story there in my dog poem. What is not seen is our grief today. Di.. Thanks for connecting to me, and I hope you win
    Edited on Feb 20, 12:23 because ''.


  • budlem
    February 19, 2004
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    This is beautiful!! You do seem to undertand animals so well. I know how you feel...for in 1998, I lost my best friend Toby. He was a terrier mix and my best friend for many years....but he came to me in a dream saying.....I am in Heaven. He watches out for me all the time. ~Bud~


  • Samplette gold member
    February 19, 2004
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    This is a sweet write for you pup....it is hard to lose them too.
    Your picture and background are stunning...
    Sam

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