bound by rust
barbed-wire to a chair
I bleed-
slightest motion
drips upon dusty floorboards
thunder crashes
each droplet cracks the walls
forms puzzle piece
my life put together
a miserable attempt
to seek happiness
dark sheets hang
inches over head
doubts of gloom cast me- a shadowed man
other thoughts, other beliefs
singing sadness: ring of truth
my broken ears; heart
tainted sins,
unforgiven of myself
I carry my cross
shamed
People have loved me,
ones loved back
gather around my chair
I am bound
they spit,
curse,
yell,
crying a different language
what have I become,
I know not anymore
set before my eyes,
my father,
my mother
two children
son - daughter,
with stones
sulfuric brimstone,
ashes pour from their eyes
hells fury could not match
the torment seen
casting of the first stone- my father
I awoke, startled and afraid
drenched with sweat,
ice like chills
it seems the same dream
again,
night terrors of haunting doom
that will never allow me to flee
it resides within my subconsciousness,
always feeding
on emotions running rampant
I wake
always
alone
Two months have passed
I stand before you still
Not a dream has passed
filled with darkness, chills
Light has brought peace
to a broken man
Pieces formed together
In to a life, God planned
No longer do the terrors
destroy my nights
sweet dreams
Instead its filled
with thoughts of her
violet lily's, a future
that is unknown
Author notes
Inspiration....my ever tormenting mind of imagination and spirit of writing for myself and others.... Name: Ademon Thanks for Reading.
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A contest entry
- Splurge: Anything and Everything by Katastrophic.
800 points, ended February 17, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Bronze trophy winner
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sensational
love the way you've written this,especially the dream sequence....got a similar idea brewing but convinced myself it wouldnt read well,you have inspired me to at least attempt such a project,my skills are extremely raw but i am a poetic sponge and talent such as yours is inspired water
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i love the details....very descriptive....great job!!!
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The stanza that begins with "dark sheets hang" is brilliantly written. I love the way the word "shamed" is in a separate line, it was perfect. It seems that this is exactly what a POW would be thinking as they are being tormented-- thinking about their family, their failure, their religion...
I was very surprised by this poem and honestly, by how much I liked it. At first I was a little unsure about the lack of punctuation and pauses, but it flowed extremely well. I was also expecting the torture to tear the man apart- to eat at his soul for the rest of his life. But in the end, you chose to give this man a sense of hope. I was so inspired by the last three stanzas. This poem is so unique in the way it has power and emotion about a man's life and feelings being questioned, and then it goes onto give hope to the character and to the reader. Beautifully done.
Thank you for your entry. 
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Thank you so much for such amazing feedback on my write, and thank you for the honour of Bronze, I'm very humbled and blessed thank you so much!
Aaron
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Trophies...
you deserve them..great job!
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Thanks! I'm glad that you really liked this poem! I'm still having a mental block or writers block maybe its both? I dunno... lol
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oh my! as i read this, i realized i stopped breathing, just from the sheer intensity, i guess. the imagery is wonderful. the drip that cracks the floor reminds me of a runner in my stocking... once it starts, it keeps going. except in the floorboards, the cracks are jagged and can open like in an earthquake... sort of how i felt reading this, trembling as my heart opened up to only split.
the draw back into hope after a nightmare was gently done, like a lullaby soothing. glad to see a shiny there for this piece.
thank you for coming by to read mine, i am happy to have come by here.
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Thank you for stopping by, I still think that your power of a punch is stronger than what I have written and glad that what I wrote made you hold your breath, at least I'm doing something right! haha Thanks again for the great comment and feed back!!! Always an Honour!
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the pleasure is mine.
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Wow, I really enjoyed this write. Great metaphor and abstract enough to let the reader form their own thoughts on what to think. Your imagery was brilliant as well. Great job on this piece and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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Thank you Josh! I wrote this poem back in February when I first moved here to Colorado, things weren't the best regarding some of the stress that was currently going on in my life, since then many things have changed for the better and I edited this poem and added to it. I'm glad that you enjoyed the metaphor's, I try to write to allow the audience to interpret it how they see fit and how it can relate to them. Thank you for the honour of being in your contest, best wishes in Judging this contest. There are many fantastic writers in this already!
Aaron
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I love your way of flow in the words that you choose. I don't have night terrors i just have frighting dreams. I loved the emotion in the poem
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Such an emotional write!! oh I used to have lots of night terrors, but now I don't even remember my dreams night terrors or not.. sometimes I think that is worse, because when you wake up you freaked out but don't know why and yet you feel like you should know.. it's strange, but anyway I love this.. and though a bit long I think the length really made it more... idk, personal and personified the poem itself.. Thanks much for sharing hun..
Angel
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sulfuric brimstone,
ashes pour from their eyes
hells fury could not match
the torment seen
casting of the first stone- my father
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ah, I used to have nightmares and night terrors every year around the same time and they were reoccuring. I hated going to sleep. I would pray and I tried lucid dreaming and everything. so I can relate to this. I guess we have such good imaginations we scare ourselves. ..lol. I didn't have them at all this year. I'm so glad! I think the poetry writing helped. brought out my inner demons and dealt with them.
well written :) I especially like the first stanza and the imagery throughout the poem and the ending
*hug*
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Bravo!
Very dark stuff here. I sense a lot of turmoil in you.
"doubts of gloom cast me- a shadowed man
other thoughts, other beliefs
singing sadness: ring of truth
my broken ears; heart
tainted sins,
unforgiven of myself
I carry my cross"
Those are murky feelings. I read these & I see traces of my own life here. Either way, very well-written.
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Extrememly deep piece.
Full of fear and sorrow.
Wow.....seems so personal.
Wonderful job. Good luck to you!
♥ Katie
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The title of Your poem alone totally sucked me into reading it.
"bound by rust
barbed-wire to a chair
I bleed-
slightest motion
drips upon dusty floorboards
thunder crashes
each droplet cracks the walls
forms puzzle piece
my life put together
a miserable attempt
to seek happiness"
The detail there is just really strong. I loved reading your poem! You've got a real talent with words.
thanks for entering
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Thank you so very much for you amazing comment, I'm blessed that you enjoyed it as much as you did! Thank you.
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Oh no problem! It was great poem!
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This was a harsh piece to read, probably because I can relate to it in parts. You have such a creative word choice that it draws the reader in and leaves us wanting more. Well done. Best to you in the contest
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wow.... this is impressive. usually hate that shit about it all being a dream.. but this.. this is fantastic. it is really suited here, this poem is so sad but for some reason it inspires me.. i know,.. i'm weird.. but i love this. so sad and emotion packed. great job here!!
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wow beautifully done
I think i can really identify with alot of this.
its a scarey thing those nightmares that keep people from sleep
Thanks for sharing fire
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I think it's amazing how many people really do have night terrors even after infancy, and the fact that people can still have them i'm glad that you enjoyed this poem! thank you for the wonderful comment!
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wow this is so sad and yet wonderfully written. I love this it's so intense and very creepy, but a good creepy lol. Amazing job, good luck in the contest!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Creepy can be good sometimes as long as it's painting a vivid picture for everyone to see what I saw, I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem! Thank you for the comment.
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Brilliantly penned here. I love this one. Amazing impact. I love the pic as well, but your words stand picture perfect all on their own. Well done!
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Do you think that the Picture takes away from the poem?!
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No I don't, I love the picture, it adds to it. I was just trying to let you know that your words are amazing with or with-out the picture.. brilliant write and picture!
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we are all alone
alone with in our skin! great job love the last line!!!!!!!
I wake
always
alone
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I believe that there will always be apart of us that will be alone no matter who we surround ourselves with or even if we find that someone, but then again I could be completely wrong.
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here it is again
your unique ability for description
read effortlessly
amazing my friend
God bless you...
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Hey I'm really glad that you enjoyed the poem, It's been awhile since I've seen you but maybe that is my fault and the fact that I haven't been on as much as I have been lately due to the move to Colorado, I hope you're doing well and can catch up with you soon!
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OHHHH creapy.... I really like this.. its deep and a just a bit creapy!!!! I wish you all the best in the contest... keep it up great poet!!
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Thank you very much!
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aw wow
this is a very powerful poem with strong imagery and emotions good luck in the contestmaralisa
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Thanks Maralisa, I'm really glad that you enjoyed this piece!
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Oh wow this is a dark and vivid piece. Such amazing imagery speaks of a haunting time for you.
Best wishes in the contest
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thanks so much I'm really glad that you enjoyed the imagery presented in this piece.
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Powerful!
Wow man, you do it again, another great write you've presented to us here at AP. I know you're pretty good at these picture prompt poems, and this one is up there with your other great writes. Well done and thanks for sharing, also good luck in this contest.
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Thanks for the awesome comment, but believe it or not I wrote the poem first and then after I finished editing it, I found the picture. I thought that it would add more emotions to the poem! Thanks for the wonderful comment!!!
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I like this. A lot. Good luck in the contest.
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Aww thanks hon, I'm really glad that you liked it!
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Such a powerful write. It brings to mind so many of my nightmares. And sadly, if they continue, sometimes you get to the point where you can't sleep if you're alone.
Ugh, my train of thought wanders so damn easily
Anyways, the imagery in this was amazing, it was as if I could see it, as if I could feel it. As if it was happening to me. It's a powerful thing to be able to do that.
Awesomeness, if this doesn't place then my faith in poety is destroyed.
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Thank you for the amazing comment I'm glad that my poem gave you such in-depth thought on different things and makes your mind wonder.
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Ooh this one gave me chills, would have to hug my teddy I think if i had this nightmare C
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Chills, are always a good thing, I'm glad that I was able to give you some!
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Powerful. Builds up broodingly to the finish. Another excellent write.
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Hey hon, if you would be so kind, I finished the editing and added a picture to this wasn't sure if you wanted to read the final product of the original write that you read or not but it's up now thank you again for your comment!
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Much improved layout. Your message is still evident, great read.
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