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Tears

 

The room is dark, but you can
Hear the soft sighs and tears
Falling ever so quietly down
Her pale face as she thinks
Of her lover in the arms of
Another ,enjoying the taste,
Taste of sweet sin on her
Pouty rose red lips
She tries so hard to forget
The pleasure of his touch,
Soft yeilding embraces that
Left her speechless in love
But nothing seemed to cure
The pain she felt as she
Remembered every moment
With the man she once
Had in her unfortuante life

Author notes

this poem is based off my feelings and this picture http://little-maggot.deviantart.com/art/Cry-yourself-to-sleep-68921156

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  • teardrop gold member
    April 5

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    I had to visit your port here when seeing your name. (Teardrop) LOL...

    I really liked the depth of this poem and the words you use to describe the pain. Great picture prompt.


  • Flowergirl
    March 19
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    very nice and emotional work i love it keep it up....


  • Lanasaur
    March 18

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    Scary and sad but BRILL!

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. The poem really describes the picture excellent. It's quite sad and it feels like a bit in a horror moovie. Great job!
    Have a nice day!
    Lana
    x


  • hks
    February 25

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    ur amazing at conveying how you feel
    and the way you do it isnt monotonous or uniform, in the boring type of way atleast.

    your a great poet..


  • ms.perezc.
    February 12

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    wow! this poem literally just flows out off the page so smoothy. nice work.. though meloncholy, but beautifully written :]


  • Lancashire Lad
    February 11

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    great piece

    this was so sad yet brilliantly written out. i certainly feel for this girl. its horrible to be in that situation, one which im sure we have all been in x good luck


  • guardianhost gold member
    February 9

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    How well I can relate

    forbidden, sensual, extremely moving.
    brought back alot of memories.
    Well penned.

    cheryl

  • ScaryGothMother
    February 4

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    such a sad and dark write, thank you for sharing this it is a very dark write but creative and i enjoyed it very much.

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