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Distant Touch

"Distant Touch"

Inside I feel so lonely,
lost and somewhat confused.
Unable to comprehend some things,
between me and you.......

Lonely without the passion and sparks,
that my body aches from these unmet needs.
My wandering mind reaches out in desperation,
wondering why you don't want me......

Lieing in bed many nights,
your touch is what I need.
It kills me deep inside to think that,
maybe you really dont care about me.....

Our love is real but feels so incomplete,
without your soft touches carressing me.
I only desire you and want nobody else,
Don't you feel the same way about me??

Fumbling through all these emotions,
trying to make sence to set my mind at ease,
but that same question keeps coming up,
How can he REALLY love me????

Each night as I snuggle under the covers,
with you beside me,
Oh how I wish that you would just......


But your distant touch keeps reminding me.

   

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 20

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    Deeply Emotional

    I like your insecurity in this piece as it really comes through so well. This is emotional and powerful and shows your fears of wondering whether he loves you and wants you. You portray this well. A well-written piece indeed.

    Darkest Love
    Wayne Leon


    • JaydensNanas
      February 22
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      You are good for this writer's ego!

      Thanks Wayne for reading,your applause and commenting on this, you are definatley GOOD lol for this writers ego!! Thanks again my friend!~Hugs,Kel


  • Twilight4Eternity
    February 5

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    I love how you ended this... the "oh how I wish that you would just...." leaving it open like that. And then the last line just seals it. Excellent ending which to me is the most important part of a poem.

    You also had a good flow and I love rhyming.

    Very well done.

    Thanks for the entry!


    • JaydensNanas
      February 5
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      Thank you mam!

      Thank you very much for your comment on my poem!! Glad you enjoyed it!!

  • Just4u
    February 4
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    More can be said in a minute of touch then in a month of
    conversation...

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