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Law of Birth




Neurotic noises
  thundering pulsatively
    through forehead...
  a mental clogging
repetitive in nature.

Flashing lights
  focusing
    reflecting
    white medical walls.

  Imagination unveils
    sweat dripping
        a little too late


              ~a newborn dies~










Author notes

Prompt: Sultry

30 Words

Here, the sultry is refered to as a choking feeling due to heat rising from within.

Thanks for the prompt.

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  • forever dreaming
    March 14, 2009
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    Hey preets, long time no read. Been ages since I checked in I know. Oh this is dark but beautifully crafted at the same time. A lot said in a shortish piece but I think thats all thats needed with this poem. Very well crafted and thought provoking. Love Claire

  • ScaryGothMother
    February 4, 2009

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    this is a very dark and sad write thank you for letting me read and congratulationsfor winning a trophy.


  • Cannonsfire
    February 3, 2009
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    Captivating and so starkly sad C


  • Apocalyptic Scarves
    February 3, 2009
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    interesting take on the prompt, i'll give you creativity here with some nice images to go with it

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