tire-marks turned scabs
paths leading into yesterdays
her nails
glam girl touch
tore the little roads
shouts of clear!
didn't bring him back
i'm calling it
7:55 am
how she
begged for more
we have her
in custody
even then
i knew the wife
would notice
the neighbor
claims the victim
was running
woken at home
electric eel clock
squealed
waking the judge
she rolled over
reaching
stroking my scars
BITCH she screamed
you said you were done
you wanted to stay
with me
gods know i deserved it
the neighbors claim
she chased him down
axe in hand
A contest entry
- In Honour of the Scorned Woman/Man by NurseChilly.
8000 points, ended February 28, 18 entries
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Comments
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i liked this piece, mostly.... apart from the word BITCH in capitals, it would have been much better by using good solid traditional punctuation
such as- bitch! she screamed
some of the tensing is also a bit awry but on the whole a good piece
well done and many thanks for entering
G.x
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