Thousands of years ago,
in the sands of time....
Goddesses were hailed as powerful.
They lived alongside Gods who were both kind and not.
Giving life and happiness to the people of the world.
Today in the present.
We preach tolerance and equality.
But yet.....
Scorned are those who dare claim peace.
Shunned are those who turn to the Goddess.
Hear my plea, I beg you now!
This is not some hollywood silver screen!
Can you hear me?
I'm sure you can.
The way I follow is ancient and powerful.
I find peace in my prayers and knowledge the Goddess brings.
Comfort in knowing I am loved.
The earth is connected to me.
I am connected to it.
everything has a place and all must play a part.
Cast aside your hate that many have taught you.
Listen to me now.....
Can you understand me?
Author notes
Meh, I need sleep. I like it tho.
A contest entry
- Easy as Pie by Cyanide Dreams.
3250 points, ended April 17, 2009, 132 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Random thoughts running through my head to form poetry in an insomniac state...
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Powerful, deep , and from the depths of ur soul ..
The last few lines had me sighing ..
So true u are
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This is very good, although I think it some ways it could be better. I'm not entirely sure how exactly. I definitely love these two parts:
"Cast aside your hate that many have taught you"
"This is not some hollywood silver screen!"
I think those lines are very powerful. They really show how messed up America and other countries are. Guess we aren't as free and tolerant afterall, huh? I hope more people accept you for who you are; as an atheist I also know how it feels to be an outsider. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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This gives so much in the aspect of power and inspiration. THis is certainly a wonderful write worthy of an award!
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I like this, particular lines radiate power and honesty, which is never a bad thing, to be honest is the way.
You say a lot with this poem, but even more could be said i think, its your choice though.
Today in the present.
We preach tolerance and equality.
But yet.....
Scorned are those who dare claim peace.
Shunned are those who turn to the Goddess.
I think these lines are true, so many people talk about equality, but yet they do not treat people who are not the same as them as their equals, it is disgusting.
Your poem speaks such truth.
Holly.
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This is an intersting write. It leaves me wondering what "religion" you are. For me, this shows Wiccan, and being Wiccan myself its a most thoughtful and emotional poem. "Cast aside your hate that many have taught you" I loved this line. This has great flow and really speaks the truth. I think you could elaborate more on this poem though. Like you could talk about how one can understand you, why one should listen to your point of views on the matter. This was a very nice write. Well done and good luck.
Josh
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i give it an 8.
7/10. not your best, but an eight is good coming from a total critic. you have earned my full respect by this point, so i will give you 3 applauds. one for the beginning, one for the middle, and one for the end. with some editing, that would be great... now if you can tell me what any of this has to do with my PB&J sandwitch, i would love to know.
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