Your defiant obedience thrills me,
Your deafening silence will blind my ears,
Your pacifist rage fills me with fury,
But it's my loving hate that draws you near.
...Just grasp the concept of living the dream,
Easy to succumb to insanity...
Nothing will ever be quite as it seems,
The complication of humanity...!
Your humming heart shows (cold as thawing snow,)
The virtue of your anticipation-
Regretful walls are laughing at us now,
The purity of humiliation!
My defiant obedience bores you,
My deafening silence just blinds your ears.
My pacifist rage does nothing for you...
But it is my hating love that you fear.
Author notes
1, Defiance, 2. Purity, 5. Humiliation,
7. Virtue, 10. Anticipation, 13. Regret,
15. Rage, 16. Insanity, 17. Pacifist ,
18. Fury, 20. The
“Life is really simple, but we insist on making it complicated.” -I dunno
I've made each line 10 syllables alone...
The a-b-a-b rhyme scheme should be done!
I've mixed two options, what more can I do?
I hope this entry is perfect for you!
I wanna see: "Pfft, that was a challenge?" or something similar, be creative. (That little ditty above was my way of saying that to you... But I did read the rules, honest!)
In a list
A contest entry
- Rhyme Challenge by Damnednforgotten.
1200 points, ended February 6, 2009, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Can you think of a better title?? Does it make sense?
Comments
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Your poem's made it to the finalist. I will finish the judging tomarrow. Good luck.
As a matter of fairness, you must add the final rule to the end of your poem. -
Completed
Another amazing piece, very well done, and very much enjoyed. Very good job and good luck.
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