Such tender beauty does radiate through
reflections of purity I pursue!
My heart is aching, thinking thoughts of you;
emotions surrender, colors imbue.
Your delicacy, a delight it seems
as my thoughts do hypnotically soar.
To hold you close, to my busom, my dreams
your sweet surrender, 'tis what I adore.
My throat filled with words of a great desire
drenched in wet passion; your smile denotes.
Mingling inside me, at the midnight hour,
your heart beats in tunes of musical notes.
My tender sweet love, how dare you tease me
your pure exquisiteness, I wish to see!
Author notes
An English sonnet has 14 lines of 10 syllables each.
It is written in iambic pentameter
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Please tell me what you think
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"emotions surrender" Oooh, nice!
I usually stay away from sonnets as they are anything but my strong point. Youve worked wonders with the form though! Great job with that. Exciting, new, inspiring and delightful 
Good luck in the contest 
~n
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This has a very nice feeling to it, loving and a bit lustful! I'm not sure about the number of syllables, but I think that might be my pronunciation. I enjoyed reading this!
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Sweet and lovely
Well done and good luck to you
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I can't quite figure out this rhyme scheme ... and the first line has more than 10 syllables. (11 I think) it should be
abab cdcd efef gg ( 14 lines ten syllables each) 3 quatrains and a couplet. (4 lines X3 and then 2 lines that rhyme.) If you want to try and edit there is time. -
Ummm.. is this a tribute to a rose or to the love of your life? I loved it... keep this quality up for it is publishing worthy
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Brilliant!
It's really good
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Lovely!
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